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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:13:31 GMT -8
i love this. it is very simplistic and sweet. great job.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:16:26 GMT -8
Okay, since I agree with what Sparks(that sounds familiar) and Pseudomuse said, what can I say? I just really, really adored this. It was great, it was harsh, but softened by certain words, so it was a great combination. Does that make sense or am I just rambling? I do that a lot. Well, I loved it anyway! Great job! ;D
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 14:49:30 GMT -8
It was a really great poem, good, attentive rhythm, but it was a tiny bit cliche for me also.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 19:27:01 GMT -8
Your word usage is perfect the way it is.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 14:52:50 GMT -8
Well, I can't really compete with that, because I'm not that great of critic. I just really enjoyed this, it made me stop and think, and really focus my attention on this, which I really appreciate in a poem. Great word usage, and I love how your poems don't drag on, but are short and sweet, and use really neat words. I guess that's all I have to say? Lovely job.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 28, 2005 15:16:35 GMT -8
kewl. ;D
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 19:30:52 GMT -8
Hmmm, i'm running out of variety words to tell you how much i like your poems. Can't you have just one flop so i don't feel like such a bad poet? I have tons of flops. geez, do you have any? amazing job once again. i think i like your poems so much because they actually sometimes have words i don't know. that's such a change from using words like superfluous, condone, condenscending, and infiltrate, and having people go "What language are you speaking?" Thank you, thank you, thank you for challenging my mind! May God bless you for that!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 8, 2005 10:19:45 GMT -8
i agree
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Grandad
Jun 28, 2005 22:10:27 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 28, 2005 22:10:27 GMT -8
wow, i just reread that and it sounded very rude. i didn't mean i didn't like the one about ur grandmother, i just meant i think you wrote this better. does that make sense?
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Grandad
Jun 27, 2005 23:03:59 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 27, 2005 23:03:59 GMT -8
i like this one a lot better than the one about ur grandmother. i think u did an excellent job. it was very beautiful.
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Jan 26, 2005 21:23:49 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:23:49 GMT -8
Hmmm, I think I need to start being more current, because I find by the time I read stuff, everybody has already said what I want to. I DON'T think it was crap, maybe a teensy, weensy, tiny, tiny, little-bitty bit cliche, but there's enough variety in there for it not to really be. I loiked it(that means i love/liked it) Good job. ;D
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 11, 2005 12:29:41 GMT -8
THIS IS AWESOME!!!!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 8, 2005 15:28:17 GMT -8
I adore it. I think since you first posted on here, you've improved humongously!! i think if we gave out awards, you would no doubt win the most improved. i love the imagery and emotion. wonderful job! one tiny suggestion, in the second line, the word boredom just seems out of place. why not try ennui? i'm pretty sure it's a synonym for boredom, or else all those romance novels have been lying to me!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Mar 3, 2005 20:08:57 GMT -8
*sigh* I never get tired of reading your poems. There's just . . . something . . about them that I can never quit liking. Amazing. I loved this.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Mar 7, 2005 20:51:15 GMT -8
i'm not gonna touch that. except to say, wow. . but i'm not gonna touch that.
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