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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 15:32:47 GMT -8
I have nothing else to do, so I'll post on my own poetry a couple times. That way, i'll gain more points towards being a stable citizen instead of just one of us. God, i love this site. it gives me something to do. if ur reading this, please reply. I'm really nervous about my poetry, because my parents like it. ugh. don't you just love the word ugh? i do. my friend Brenna always says ugh. it's funny.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:01:23 GMT -8
Thanks. I really appreciate you commenting! ;D
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 25, 2005 14:53:08 GMT -8
Hidden, lost in black and gray. Haunted, by a shade, of what was before but isn’t now, can’t remember anyhow.
Shades part, more frightening than them, it what I might see, what might have been, but it’s gone again.
Truth, don’t want revealed, but can no longer stay, protected by black and gray, shades, of what I knew.
Over, slowly is the light, being taken, feelings shaken, cannot forgive, but it’s like, not forgiving me, killing me, if you die, I don’t live.
Winter, in my soul, past all control, no longer hidden, but shadowed, by a thousand shades of restless, of pain, by a thousand shades of darkness in my soul.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:05:44 GMT -8
Our wiry looks Once again becoming Smooth and supple that was my favorite part, just by the way. it just kind of struck me. great imagery. plus i love the word wiry.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:04:59 GMT -8
I liked it. Wonderful job!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:07:46 GMT -8
Well, I guess Sparks pretty much said it all. I agree, but I do like this poem a lot, and it has great potential. If you redo it, I would love to see the redone version. Just email it to me at msrowe1@netzero.net. Great job!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 15:55:34 GMT -8
shoo. I'm glad, because it kicks my poetry's butt. i really love your work.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 15:34:47 GMT -8
I didn't mean it was bad or anything, I really did love it!!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:31:29 GMT -8
I definetely have a few wash poems, but I don't think this is one. I liked it, but I agree it almost seems like just words, though it has the potential to be something really good i think. I liked it, though. ;D
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:12:52 GMT -8
Wow. This is a really cliche topic, and you managed to use amazing imagery to make something totally unique and original, and yo just get this really vivid image of winter, put in an unusual perspective. Great job, I loved it!
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Claire
Jun 22, 2005 10:04:05 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:04:05 GMT -8
I love it, but it does seem like it's a little short.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 15:51:51 GMT -8
we never do cool stuff like that in english. just a bunch of stupid grammar, which i hate. i'm only in 8th grade though, maybe that's why? who knows, i hate grammar. this was a really good poem, but i think i would have got it better if i would have known the people you were talking about. excellent work, though.
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Falling
Feb 2, 2005 17:12:00 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Feb 2, 2005 17:12:00 GMT -8
kewl.
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Falling
Jan 26, 2005 21:19:58 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:19:58 GMT -8
Plus, I really loved the part that goes She is falling Falling forever Forever into glory Far beyond my reach.
It just really made me think. Great job.
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Falling
Jan 26, 2005 21:18:11 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:18:11 GMT -8
Wow. That was so cool. I really loved the idea, and just the words you used were amazing. It just really appealed to be. I just don't really know what to say, I don't have any criticism, so, like, great job I guess! ;D
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