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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 11, 2005 16:04:08 GMT -8
well, hopefully, but what is the chance they're gonna wanna be with me if I find them? (i'm not saying this about you). AND YOU HAVE SEEN MOULIN ROUGE?!?! Thank God, I thought I was the only one. Don't you just ADORE that movie? I looove the part where they do the tango and sing Roxanne. i don't know, nicole kidman is SOOOOOO pretty. I wish i looked like that!!! lol. it makes me wanna write a poem, but i don't know . . .
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 8, 2005 15:24:28 GMT -8
i'm a sucker for romance and love, though sadly i do not believe i'll find it( even out of all the male species, i don't think there's anyone crazy enough to fall for me!!) but this does express you emotion amazingly well. i like it, even if i don't agree with the concept, and that's a really cool thing, because you made me like something i don't agree with, and that's a hard thing to do, so congrats. this is a good poem.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jul 1, 2005 21:11:10 GMT -8
WRITE SOME MORE LIKE THIS, I LOVED IT!!!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 27, 2005 22:40:29 GMT -8
i agree AND PUT IT IN THE HALL OF FAME!!!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 23:07:47 GMT -8
OMG! I ADORED THIS PASSIONATELY! WHERE ON EARTH WAS I WHEN IT WAS POSTED?!?!?!?!?!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Mar 8, 2005 23:17:52 GMT -8
really creepy. i loved it.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 4, 2005 10:10:21 GMT -8
i loved it! nice imagery
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 2, 2005 21:45:29 GMT -8
i don't know. i really can't concentrate when it's in this form. i couldn't really follow it. and thank you for commenting!!!!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 19:24:07 GMT -8
foreshadowed means it's hinted at before it happens, or it hints somethings going to happen.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 14:56:41 GMT -8
I don't know, I tried some of those words in there, and they sounded pretty good. But, like I said, I think I'm just a person rather oblivious to stuff, like rhythm? But I liked you new ending, but instead of upcoming lust, which, maybe I'm just weird, sounded kinda off, you could use forshadowed lust? I don't know, whatever you want. But, really good job, neways. Love to everyone ;D
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:29:23 GMT -8
Okay, I think Psuedomuse might be involved with a thesarus, or is having a Thesarus Day(yeah! those are fun!) but has a good point. The colors should be more unusual, because(and maybe I'm just a really oblivious person?) I didn't notice you were really trying to use the colors. But I really liked it, especially the part about the wicked things they've done, because I really love the word wicked, because it's just such a wicked word, and okay, i'm going to stop now. But good job, I like this and it has potential, a whole darn lot! ;D
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 11, 2005 16:09:01 GMT -8
I agree with confusion, and i'm not sure if i liked the way the words ran together sumtimes. it seems a little random and kind of hard to follow. good idea great potential, just seems like it could use some polishing and emotion.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 25, 2005 18:35:03 GMT -8
kewl.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:10:56 GMT -8
maybe it's just me, but something about numbers, like in years, just kind of throws me off. they seem too technical, especially in poetry, and especially this one which is sooo beautiful. now, this is probably a weird suggestion and please ignore it if you want to, but maybe you could just say "resolutions made this year, it shall be the best year of my life" instead of 2005, and then just take out the 2006, because you say next year in the line before it and makes sense. but maybe, probably, i'm just weird.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 11, 2005 16:07:03 GMT -8
Nice job. One of the best kinds of poetry is the kind readers can connect with. Wonderful.
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