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Post by ScarletMornings on Apr 21, 2008 20:28:04 GMT -8
wow. that was just. wow.
so powerful. so beautiful.
just wow.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Sept 18, 2005 10:38:43 GMT -8
omg, fourteen PAGES? geez. that's amazing.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 21:31:34 GMT -8
weeellll. here it goes. Rhylin Anthret is twenty. She has long tawny brown hair with blue green eyes flecked with gold. she is ridiculously tanned and very strong and pretty. she has a heart shaped elfin face, and is very short, only about 5' 1 or 5' 2 however, she is one of the most skilled fighters anywhere. she is the best archer from her homeland in the mountains of Sversiland (can i do that?). she can fight with daggers, bare handed, or with any sword you give her. She is also an excellent rider and hunter/tracker. She is a sworn virgin and has vowed not to marry. Her only loyalty is to her sister Rachael, who is her elder by five years, whom she is absolutely devoted to. Rachael is hidden away somewhere, a secret which Rhylin fiercely guards to protect her sister from something no one is quite sure of. Rhylin at all times has a dagger in her boots, on her thigh, and at her waist, along with a sword. she also carries a bow and quiver. how was that? and can there be magic stuff?
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Post by ScarletMornings on Feb 11, 2006 13:13:11 GMT -8
i adore it. completely.
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"Shoe"
Nov 9, 2005 18:46:36 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 9, 2005 18:46:36 GMT -8
hey, people cuss on here a lot. sometimes it just fits the mood of the tone. i appreciate you blanking it out a little. i've got nothing against angry lyrics. this song seems to have a lot of great potential for a very powerful song, except in some parts you just seem to be grasping at stuff that rhymes which makes it seem forced and breaks the rythm. don't push at rhymes too hard. make sure whatever you're rhyming makes sense. other than that, i think this is really a good song. angry, and explicit, but still good.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 7, 2005 14:26:12 GMT -8
that's exactly it. i wish i was a good critiquer. *sighs wistfully
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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 7, 2005 14:02:38 GMT -8
okay wow i don't know how i totally missed that we had a song lyrics board. anyways, this is a really cliche idea, but i really think this has potential if you just improve diction and imagery. i agree with ramona(outsane) and i think this is a pretty good song. good job.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 24, 2005 20:14:36 GMT -8
usually, i don't like to read song lyrics, but i am SOOO glad i read this. this is absolutely amazing to me. i totally love the message because i absolutely feel that way and i think it's just so true. the words aren't forced and i love the diction, how you use intelligent language. i just absolutely adore. no crit from me.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 16, 2005 14:01:28 GMT -8
wooow i'm not the youngest! *does a woohoo dance*
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Post by ScarletMornings on Sept 1, 2005 13:25:23 GMT -8
are you kidding? there's someone YOUNGER than me? THANK YOU GOD
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Post by ScarletMornings on Sept 1, 2005 13:28:10 GMT -8
i feel so inadequate sumtimes. sigh.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 27, 2005 23:28:40 GMT -8
ahhhh
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 25, 2005 18:50:48 GMT -8
number one, what does atm stand for. and number 2, i have nothing against awesome possom, i just don't think i've ever heard anway say it.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 22:49:03 GMT -8
it's because ur on fire, confusion. this is definetly a strange board. someone said awesome possom.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 8, 2005 15:33:38 GMT -8
and the posts seem hugley spaced out over time. . . weird.
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