Alexander Inspired ProsePoetry

Pseudomuse
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We went, we saw, we didn't quite conquer.

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Alexander Inspired ProsePoetry Jun 2, 2005 18:47:24 GMT -8

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Post by Pseudomuse on Jun 2, 2005 18:47:24 GMT -8

not sure on the title...I don't think it really needs one anyway.
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Textbooks made out of five endangered
Sequoias and emo tartans running down
Your skin
Crossroads and tupac danced
Rhythm and blues: a cat stevens mirrored life
Techobopblondeblueeyedboy
In shades of black and grey
Tempered by flirty rosesaltpurple
Jousting and battled as the 10th level Jedi
With a green light saber you claimed was your
Alter ego
And
Sicktightmadfresh
Is all you really needed to say.

You'll never be quite the same again after that Bible you've been thumping all these years finally has enough and beats the living s**t out of you. - Horoscope in "The Onion"

I thought you just said we were done doing things the stupid way.

If you want to call me that, smile.

Of all the gin joints in all the towns in all the world, she walks into mine.

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Alexander Inspired ProsePoetry Jun 3, 2005 0:34:06 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on Jun 3, 2005 0:34:06 GMT -8 i realli like it! it's realli descriptive and imaginative!! perhaps to make it even better you could extend it a little, with a bit more emotion... only a suggestion though, it's great how it is too
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

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Alexander Inspired ProsePoetry Jun 11, 2005 16:09:01 GMT -8

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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 11, 2005 16:09:01 GMT -8

I agree with confusion, and i'm not sure if i liked the way the words ran together sumtimes. it seems a little random and kind of hard to follow. good idea great potential, just seems like it could use some polishing and emotion.

"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave,
Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind;
Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave.
I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned."

-- Edna St. Vincent Millay,
from "Dirge Without Music"

Go to the link and read it!

Ramona Administration Posts: 1,323	Alexander Inspired ProsePoetry Jun 12, 2005 14:48:02 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Ramona on Jun 12, 2005 14:48:02 GMT -8 I liked the two last lines a lot. It had great imagery, though I'm not exactly sure on this one, monstly because I don't understand it, and am not sure whether it's something that was meant to be understood.
	"Hold my head inside your hands. I need someone who understands. I need someone, someone who hears. For you I've waited all these years. For you I'd wait 'til kingdom come, Until my day, my day is done. And say you'll come and set me free. Just say you'll wait, you'll wait for me."

Alexander Inspired ProsePoetry

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