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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 25, 2005 14:53:08 GMT -8
Hidden,
lost in black and gray.
Haunted,
by a shade,
of what was before
but isn’t now,
can’t remember anyhow.
Shades part,
more frightening than them,
it what I might see,
what might have been,
but it’s gone again.
Truth,
don’t want revealed,
but can no longer stay,
protected by black and gray,
shades,
of what I knew.
Over,
slowly is the light,
being taken,
feelings shaken,
cannot forgive,
but it’s like,
not forgiving me, killing me,
if you die, I don’t live.
Winter,
in my soul,
past all control,
no longer hidden,
but shadowed,
by a thousand shades
of restless,
of pain,
by a thousand shades
of darkness in my soul.
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Post by nydreamer on Jan 25, 2005 20:21:43 GMT -8
Very good. I liked the whole plot and rythym(probabley spelled that wrong) keep writing!!!  |
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 26, 2005 21:01:23 GMT -8
Thanks. I really appreciate you commenting! ;D
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 15:32:47 GMT -8
I have nothing else to do, so I'll post on my own poetry a couple times. That way, i'll gain more points towards being a stable citizen instead of just one of us. God, i love this site. it gives me something to do. if ur reading this, please reply. I'm really nervous about my poetry, because my parents like it. ugh. don't you just love the word ugh? i do. my friend Brenna always says ugh. it's funny.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 15:33:32 GMT -8
that was so random.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 16:22:19 GMT -8
Do you know, i don't really love tots, i just love Napoleon Dynamite?
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Post by lelandluver4eva on Nov 10, 2005 19:28:20 GMT -8
i love it. its absolutely brilliant ( im not surprised to say that since this is a poem coming from a complete genius). i dont even know why you're apart of this site you should be out be making millions
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Post by muzikishappiness on Nov 12, 2005 14:38:42 GMT -8
This is beautiful. I can totally relate, and I like the setup you have for it too, how its not just the boring old "hm...what rhymes with 'them'?? I'll just post something completely random!" -a lot of novice writers seem to do that and it just bugs me...a lot.
Its descriptive and deep and even a little dark. My style exactly. I love it.
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Post by Ramona on Nov 14, 2005 8:11:44 GMT -8
I really like this because it's different than what you usually write (well, what you usually post) it's a little bit dark, but a lot of originality.
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Post by onemoremile on Nov 16, 2005 13:24:49 GMT -8
wow, you have an art for rambling... yep, I like saying uggh, and bleh, and bah, and pah, and pish... *blathers on for eternity* sorry, I know I haven't commented on your poem, but I didn't know what to say, so I just randomly rambled... ah well  |
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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 16, 2005 13:29:01 GMT -8
is that like a good don't know what to say or a bad don't know what to say?
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Post by darktears on Nov 16, 2005 14:29:27 GMT -8
I liked this alot. Scarlet, your way to good at poetry! Lol. It was so mysterious, or so I though it was, that I liked it alot. Nice JOB!
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Post by cry,crayola. on Nov 25, 2005 15:29:42 GMT -8
i love how each little stanza has it's own kinda title thing. do ya know what i mean? i like it lots and lots.
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Post by onemoremile on Nov 27, 2005 2:04:52 GMT -8
It was a good I don't know what to say! All your poems are brilliant, so it's just hard to keep thinking up new compliments! |
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Post by cry,crayola. on Nov 30, 2005 19:52:19 GMT -8
of course all of your poems are brilliant. you really should have some of these published, darling. *coughcindywantsadedicationcough*
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