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Post by darktears on Dec 18, 2005 14:10:15 GMT -8
Oh, I like this alot. I don't know what I like about it, I just do...you know? Well if you don't then...well, I'm not sure, but I'm babbling...so I must say, I do like this poem, good job.
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Post by darktears on Dec 13, 2005 18:36:23 GMT -8
I don't mind at ALL that your poems are long, because they are absouletly brilliant, and I love them!
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Post by darktears on Dec 12, 2005 15:51:39 GMT -8
This is as cookies4breakfast said stunning. amazing. breathtaking. beautiful. masterful. stupendous. outstanding, lol. It's very wonderful.
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Post by darktears on Dec 18, 2005 14:10:52 GMT -8
Alright, thanks alot to you all.
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Post by darktears on Dec 12, 2005 15:52:15 GMT -8
Thank you, I will try alot harder to get the message out.
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Post by darktears on Dec 11, 2005 19:27:14 GMT -8
Um, about this poem. It's about a divorce...I hope I got that message through, I'm not sure if I did.
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Post by darktears on Dec 11, 2005 19:25:02 GMT -8
What did I do? Was it something I said, Something I did. Do you infect me with pain, Because You enjoy it? Or was some kind of bet with evil? I hope you know, How much love you ripped from me.
What did she do? To make you leave. Didn't you know she loved you, Didn't you love her too? Was it hard for you to let the words, "I love you" caress your lips. You weren't manly enough, Were you? Not strong enough.
What did he do? Was it that he wasn't good at sports, He wasn't good at things , You wanted him to be good at. He tried to make you proud, But you obviously couldn't see that. You didn't understand, His troubles.
What did we do? You both say it was a two-way decision. But how can I believe that, When she cries every night. When I cry every night. You made us all hurt, And now were all in pain. You don't care though, You have a new model, It's better then us, isn't it? I ask myself again, What could we do? What could we- your family- do? The answer? Nothing.
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Post by darktears on Dec 11, 2005 19:12:46 GMT -8
Oh my, this is brilliant. I love how it's put and I just love the everything. It's just fantastic, and so stunning.
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Post by darktears on Dec 10, 2005 9:52:35 GMT -8
This is soo..what's a good word? Spectacular. Words can't describe how well written it is. I absolutely love it, it's so well written and just very well done. It's brilliant.
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Post by darktears on Dec 10, 2005 9:55:46 GMT -8
Oh, I love it too, I totally agree with everyone else. It's brilliant, I must say. I really love the third stanza most, thought they're all very well written.
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Post by darktears on Dec 10, 2005 10:02:46 GMT -8
I have to agree with Ramona when she says, how you could turn friendship into such beautiful words. The way you describe it, is amazing.
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Post by darktears on Dec 10, 2005 10:00:24 GMT -8
I really love the 'as we whisperstep through his crystal hourglass' line, ooh, absolutely my favourite, I love it so much. The whole thing is brilliant.
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Post by darktears on Dec 4, 2005 17:06:10 GMT -8
Ooh, I like this alot. It's so cool, how you mix the languages. It's soo nice. I love it.
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guilty
Dec 3, 2005 14:14:00 GMT -8
Post by darktears on Dec 3, 2005 14:14:00 GMT -8
I could totally understand it, it's very nice btw. I really like it.
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guilty
Dec 3, 2005 12:07:58 GMT -8
Post by darktears on Dec 3, 2005 12:07:58 GMT -8
I think that this means that you have a halfbrother and he is jealous of you because you can do things he can't and make your guys father proud, am I right?
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