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Post by darktears on Mar 13, 2006 10:44:22 GMT -8
Anybody?
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Post by darktears on Mar 8, 2006 18:43:23 GMT -8
Can You Look at Me? Look me in the eye And gaze like You love me...
Can you talk to me? Can you speak the words Every Girl wants to hear? I love you...
But that is gone. You ripped my heart, Like you would tear a pictue Or throw it a fire thats burning for us.
*Chorus* I know You don't Care. I used to Wanna be like you Thats before you tore me in two. Who is who?
So dance with me The questions still burning my ears. Not warmth, not cold Just burning, stinging, hating.
Oh no, I don't want this to go on and on. But I know it will.
Love me, Hate me, Forget me. Just Want me, trust me, leave me.
*Chorus* I know You don't Care. I used to Wanna be like you Thats before you tore me in two. Who is who?
Who are you? Who am I? Who are we? I know you cry At night. When your alone. I can see your tears. I know your fears.
Ooooh. Who is Who?
*Chorus* I know You don't Care. I used to Wanna be like you Thats before you tore me in two. Who is who?
Am I you?
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Post by darktears on Jan 31, 2006 20:05:25 GMT -8
Thank you very much. I reread what I had written and I agree with you. I'll work on this alot.
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Post by darktears on Jan 30, 2006 18:20:12 GMT -8
There are secrets that I hide, Secrets you musn't know. Some are truth and some are lies. Please just walk away, just leave me here. Cause you must go.
Every day I have some troubles, But Im sure to get through them. Please confide me, And I will help you, to get through your problems. Please just talk to me. Because I want to help.
*Chorus* Please just let me know. No more secrets or lies About yourself. Don't, Don't hide from me. I can help you, baby. Please don't scream.
Don't matter what time you ask. Ill be there, by your side. To guide you, To hold you, To love you.
I can see past you, And you image you hold. Infront of friends And people you know. Id love to break the silence But I know, But I know I can't.
*Chorus* Please just let me know. No more secrets or lies About yourself. Don't, Don't hide from me. I can help you, baby. Please don't cry.
I know your trying, To be happy. Please tell me what is wrong. Please tell me what is wrong. So I can dry your tears. So I can get rid of your fears. So I can be your angel. So I can speak to you. So I know what's wrong now, Please let me help you.
*Chorus* Please just let me know. No more secrets or lies About yourself. Don't, Don't hide from me. I can help you, baby. Please do love me. I know you love me. I know you love me. I know you cry. I know you care. I know your beautiful. I know your mine, All mine. Love you forever.
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Post by darktears on Jan 23, 2006 16:02:58 GMT -8
I have no idea what Robin is talking about, I love the line So Beautiful So Wild. I think there is absouletly nothing wrong with this. It needs a tiny bit of work, but that's all. It's very good. Nice job.
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Post by darktears on Jan 22, 2006 12:18:18 GMT -8
Alright thanks. I understand what you mean by personal thing, we just wanted to add more to it, and I was hoping you guys could help. Lol.
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Post by darktears on Jan 21, 2006 18:29:49 GMT -8
Okay so me and my best friend are writing this song for our 'graduation' (From elementary to high school). We have barely anything and we'd like to finish it. We kind of want to write it about friendship and stuff, so if you could, please help us! This is what we have so far:
This was our second home From Kindergarten to Grade 7 Friends we've made And friends we've lost.
Teacher to teacher Were still together Forever.
Sharing secrets With the one we trusted Didn't know if they were rumours till my best friend told me.
Doing homework and getting mad Because I couldn't speak the right language. Being weird and acting crazy And getting looks from people Who just don't understand us.
I hope one of you can help up, because your all such amazing writers, please if you have any suggestions on how to make it better, or if you have anything to add, please tell me.
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Why
Dec 4, 2005 17:08:24 GMT -8
Post by darktears on Dec 4, 2005 17:08:24 GMT -8
Okay, I'll work on it. I haven't been writing serious stuff in a little while, so I'm kind of, blah right now. I love the word blah, don't know why, I just do.
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Why
Dec 3, 2005 15:13:31 GMT -8
Post by darktears on Dec 3, 2005 15:13:31 GMT -8
Did You Leave, Because you find somebody else, Or was it just me? Why did you go away
Because now I cry, Every night on my pillow, Because your not here, To hold my hand.
All at once, these Walls are caving In... All at once, I can not breathe, Without you here. Can you see me?
*Chorus* So Your proud of what you've done? How does it make you feel? Can you sleep at night, Knowing Somebody is crying over you? Why do you do the things you do? Why do you take things from others? Why did you rip people's souls, From the bottom of their broken hearts? Why?
So I listened to my head Because it's the only smart thing inside me, And I took a walk, But all those trails and roads reminded me of you,
And it hurts to look out the window, Because your house is glowing eerily at me, And it hurts to watch snowfall, Because that's where I expierenced love with you.
I don't want to listen to heartwrenching themes, All I want to do is, Sit here and Cry for me
*Chorus* So Your proud of what you've done? How does it make you feel? Can you sleep at night, Knowing Somebody is crying over you? Why do you do the things you do? Why do you take things from others? Why did you rip people's souls, From the bottom of their broken hearts? Why?
Do you know how hard it is for me? Or do you laugh behind my back, With your friends, You fight with them, Because they can't take it either, You loved somebody else, So you took her and left me in a pile of nothing.
Can you sleep at night? Knowing somebody is crying over you? Can you look at yourself through the remains of a broken mirror, Or do you just laugh?
*Chorus* So Your proud of what you've done? How does it make you feel? Can you sleep at night, Knowing Somebody is crying over you? Why do you do the things you do? Why do you take things from others? Why did you rip people's souls, From the bottom of their broken hearts? Why?
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Post by darktears on Nov 30, 2005 15:32:41 GMT -8
Yeah
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Post by darktears on Nov 29, 2005 20:23:29 GMT -8
Yes, it seemed like the best way to get it all out, you know?
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Post by darktears on Nov 29, 2005 15:47:17 GMT -8
Yeah, I don't care if people like this song or not, it wasn't really meant to be like liked really. I just wanted to see what people thought. It was just a way to get my feelings out and stuff.
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Post by darktears on Nov 28, 2005 15:34:15 GMT -8
Anybody??
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Post by darktears on Nov 24, 2005 17:04:03 GMT -8
|| There is a bit of swearing in this song, so yeah. Just to be warned to you all ||
Because of you two, We're all at war. And everyone Is ignoring.
And everyday, starts off the same. It seems like, Nothing more could go wrong.
Shut your mouth, Shut your damn mouth, Just shut it tight!
*Chorus* And I don't wanna hear you, Anymore, Don't wanna see you two, Crying more, Just shut up, shut up! Shut the hell up! I can't take it anymore!
All at once, We all get involved, Seems like, You can't keep it to yourself.
Nobody wants to hear it, We don't want to see it. I can't pretend anymore, Just stop your damn bickering!
Shut your mouth, Shut your damn mouth, Just shut it tight!
*Chorus* And I don't wanna hear you, Anymore, Don't wanna see you two, Crying more, Just shut up, shut up! Shut the hell up! I can't take it anymore!
Anymore, Oh, Oh Anymore, Oh, Oh
Stop...Stop...Stop, Stop, Stop, Stop (Shut up, Shut up. Shut up, Shut up)
So Close your mouth! *Chorus* And I don't wanna hear you, Anymore, Don't wanna see you two, Crying more, Just shut up, shut up! Shut the hell up! I can't take it anymore!
This song is about two of my friends who stopped being friends this year becasue of a stupid reason, and they're trying to get everyone involved and against the other person. And they've been friends forever.
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Post by darktears on Jan 9, 2006 15:39:38 GMT -8
I actually don't like hate this.. I don't know if I like this part: I've never quite understood The reason behind your hate You strike me down time and time again I'll just have to deal with it...that's fate.
I don't know why I don't like it..I mean I just don't like it as much. It seems awkward to me for some reason. But anyways, I don't know why you hate the rest of it so much, it's not that bad at all. So keep working at it.
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