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Post by Queen of Rain on Feb 9, 2005 8:26:50 GMT -8
The Side in the Middle
I think I’ll step over To the side in the middle To those that both eager And want my desire I think I’ll step over If only for a while To justify my boredom In memory of that one time
I will not stay there My emotions don’t belong But I’ll give my desire If only for a while
Attempt the beauty! Of a familiar one I aim not the eroticism But that for once Have a lover understanding As beautiful as a day
And they say every step Develops yourself And this will be a milestone In knowing my own I will not stay there But I will enjoy To admire the beauty And desire them both
one more attempt to disturb my audience.. im not sure about the title though, should it keep its present name, or should i call it Pause instead?
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Post by saralioness on Feb 10, 2005 4:57:23 GMT -8
It isn't very disturbing, it sounds more sad and bittersweet, like the thoughts a poet with consumption might think as he coughs out his last bloody breaths. Very good!
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Post by Queen of Rain on Feb 10, 2005 7:57:25 GMT -8
thats an interesting analysis, thnx... i have as tendency to g4et my poems a bit bittersweet, it must b my personality... but hwo can i atepmt to minimse the dansess in this poem??
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Post by Sparks on Feb 12, 2005 8:16:32 GMT -8
Do you think you can tell me what your subject/topic for this poem really is? It almost sounds as if the "side" is a metaphor. I'd like to hear what you have to say about your own work, other than the fact that it's likely disturbing.
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Post by Queen of Rain on Feb 19, 2005 8:11:42 GMT -8
Well i got the inspiration from conversations with my firends about developing ones sexuality... and often we condier bisexuality.. adn iinspired by a poem by DH Lawerence I wanted to write an explanation to why I would consider bisexuality...
but thats just one way of analysing it and thats why I like this poem... its a little less obvious than most of my other poems..
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