Simply A Poem

[usgeisha]

I'm just going to write this in 2 minutes. I'll time myself.
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Solemn eyes look at me
Through an open window
They glare, as though they have
Been betrayed
My heart is hard, I wonder why
I can't seem to grasp the concept
Of hatred
But right now, they stare at me
Telling me to leave
My stone heart seems to break
As I step away from the window
Into an empty hall
Perhaps love awaits me
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... I'm sorry. I was bored. I'm posting this because perhaps later something can be made of it. (I did write it in two minutes though... So when commenting, keep that in mind).

[louise]

I think it defenitely needs some more work... Maybe you should make the stare more hateful or something. Make the emotions stronger...

[usgeisha]

Yeah, I know... I'm not sure if it's worth editing though. I wasn't really in a writing mood when I wrote it, sooo... Thanks for the comment anyway!