Screaming October

[Ramona]

I've grown bold again and decided to post another of my non-rhyming efforts.

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It was October.
A time for clever guises,
A time of rain and stained promises.
You asked me and I said yes.

Don’t think I don’t remember.

Because I can’t forget.

I didn’t mean for it not to mean anything,
I’m sorry that it didn’t.
I had to let you know.
For a while when you smiled,
I remembered I liked you.
Now when you smile,
I remember that we’re through.

Sometimes it makes me scream.
I scream inside, I scream through my eyes, I scream.

I scream October.

[Confusion]

I like it!!!! i prefer this to rhyming poetry, there's more meaning, rhyming poems tend to lose that and just have rhyming words. i think this would be even better if it was extended a bit.

[Ramona]

Thank youl I thought about extending it, and now I think I might.

[Confusion]

cool! looking forward to seeing it if you do extend it!!

[Queen of Rain]

god seems jsut like my relation to my ex (but i scream december..)
ok, first stanza is a master piece and the ending too, brings a nce circle to it.. in between there it becomes a bit blabby, so muhc emotions and woprds hiding the poetry in it...

[Ramona]

Yeah, I actually was struck by inspiration while reading the SpamBlocker- confusing jumble at the end of a piece of junk mail. It said 'Screaming October' and I was like, hey, that's an awesome phrase. Then I was immediately reminded of my first boyfriend.

Thanks for the crit!