We're Not Proving Anything

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We're Not Proving Anything Nov 28, 2005 8:47:23 GMT -8

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Post by Ramona on Nov 28, 2005 8:47:23 GMT -8

I realize as we go through the motions
we’re not proving anything
today
our only passion coming from our desperation
to show that we are
that we mean something
anything
that we didn’t squander it all on an illusion
our hearts spent
on time not so well wasted
you failures

It just doesn’t seem to add up
a couple short
or a couple over
either way we don’t fit anymore
I don’t know when we started gaining extras
so that little by little
the rain from our tears
and the steam of our delusional passion
slowly warped the puzzle pieces we were made of
they fit so perfectly when we began
and suddenly it seems like all the pieces are missing
the main picture is falling apart
bit by bit

If I could take away the morning
believe me, I would
I want nothing more than to trust
this bittersweet ardor of ours
fervent as the day we started
but all the right choices for all the wrong reasons
your statements have to match the given, darling
you make about as much sense these days as I do
we’re grasping for the flames to warm ourselves by
when all we’ve got are embers
glowing as dimly as our memories
why’d we start this anyways?
I guess I never should’ve believed in us
I always lose my puzzle pieces

I can see that day coming
when we finally can admit we’re wrong
we missed that one
when even desperation fizzles out
and we give each other terse goodbyes
as we awkwardly try to go about our business
eager suddenly to get away from our mistakes
as eager as we were to plunge in and make them
my love, we’re not proving anything
no one believes it but us
we’re not proving anything, my darling
not today
not tomorrow
and our passionate yesterdays won’t make up for our wasted forever
when we don’t even believe it ourselves

by ScarletMornings

"Hold my head inside your hands.
I need someone who understands.
I need someone, someone who hears.
For you I've waited all these years.

For you I'd wait 'til kingdom come,
Until my day, my day is done.
And say you'll come and set me free.
Just say you'll wait, you'll wait for me."

Queen of Rain Senior Writer I'm Swedish, that should explain it all.. Posts: 614	We're Not Proving Anything Nov 28, 2005 12:26:03 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Queen of Rain on Nov 28, 2005 12:26:03 GMT -8 Brilliant work ScarletMornings!!! The diction here is just.. AMAZING.. it flows so well and gives an emotional tone which remains vivid and unique
	A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

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We're Not Proving Anything Nov 28, 2005 13:52:13 GMT -8

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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 28, 2005 13:52:13 GMT -8

omg i am sooo excited. i now feel like an OFFICIAL poet, because i had a poem queen of rain didn't criticize!! and i really don't know how this happened, but i suddenly realized i have FIVE poems in here. i don't know if i have ever been prouder or happier....

"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave,
Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind;
Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave.
I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned."

-- Edna St. Vincent Millay,
from "Dirge Without Music"

Go to the link and read it!

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We're Not Proving Anything Nov 28, 2005 14:08:48 GMT -8

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Post by Queen of Rain on Nov 28, 2005 14:08:48 GMT -8

DO I come out as harsch? I generally love your poetry and I jsut critisize poems because people usually appreciate some kind of constructive critisism I mean I do... I really hope you dont take it in a bad way when I comment because you are an amazing poet!

A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

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We're Not Proving Anything Nov 29, 2005 14:02:44 GMT -8

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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 29, 2005 14:02:44 GMT -8

no, no, not harsh at all!! unless of course they deserve it! it's just you seem like the ultimate high standard because you always help and can find something that needs improvement, and i feel that if you really liked it then it is probably some of my best work!!

"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave,
Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind;
Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave.
I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned."

-- Edna St. Vincent Millay,
from "Dirge Without Music"

Go to the link and read it!

Queen of Rain Senior Writer I'm Swedish, that should explain it all.. Posts: 614	We're Not Proving Anything Nov 30, 2005 1:36:12 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Queen of Rain on Nov 30, 2005 1:36:12 GMT -8 I have high standards on commenting becase you are brilliant and I know when you can do better.. I just think that constructive critisism is what really makes you develop as a poet..
	A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	We're Not Proving Anything Dec 1, 2005 15:31:37 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Dec 1, 2005 15:31:37 GMT -8 wooooow. i feel special now. thank you, and i agree about the constructive crit.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

cry,crayola. Senior Writer yeah, i'm lame. Posts: 569	We're Not Proving Anything Dec 2, 2005 22:52:46 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by cry,crayola. on Dec 2, 2005 22:52:46 GMT -8 sings sara's got another one. sara's got another one. ah, of course you're a real poet. you should really look into that publishing thing you were talking about. a very VERY good idea.
	hopless stray prone to wander. crycrayola!, warrior; lest the blind lead the blind.

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	We're Not Proving Anything Mar 16, 2006 21:38:59 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Mar 16, 2006 21:38:59 GMT -8 aww thanks benton. i love when you sing silly songs. lol. i just realized that that comment was from like a trillion years ago, but i just noticed it. so yeah! yeah. um. yeah.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

cry,crayola. Senior Writer yeah, i'm lame. Posts: 569	We're Not Proving Anything Mar 21, 2006 18:28:19 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by cry,crayola. on Mar 21, 2006 18:28:19 GMT -8 hehe! silly rowe.... it's okay, cause ya know what? i love ya neways!!!!!! woohoo!
	hopless stray prone to wander. crycrayola!, warrior; lest the blind lead the blind.

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	We're Not Proving Anything Mar 22, 2006 19:22:26 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Mar 22, 2006 19:22:26 GMT -8 well i love you more!! heehee i'm silly!
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

cry,crayola. Senior Writer yeah, i'm lame. Posts: 569	We're Not Proving Anything Mar 24, 2006 20:16:50 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by cry,crayola. on Mar 24, 2006 20:16:50 GMT -8 silly billy..... oh wait. that's my daddy. oops!
	hopless stray prone to wander. crycrayola!, warrior; lest the blind lead the blind.

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	We're Not Proving Anything Jul 26, 2007 18:56:58 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Jul 26, 2007 18:56:58 GMT -8 man we're lame. lol but yeah, i just remembered this poem was inspired from ninth grade geometry when we were doing proofs. lol what a strange inspiration, cuz i hate math!
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

Post by Ramona on Nov 28, 2005 8:47:23 GMT -8

Post by Queen of Rain on Nov 28, 2005 12:26:03 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 28, 2005 13:52:13 GMT -8

Post by Queen of Rain on Nov 28, 2005 14:08:48 GMT -8

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