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Post by Ramona on Oct 27, 2006 15:29:16 GMT -8
I guess I've been doing these three-line poems for a while. Here's a few. Each "stanza" is one poem but they don't have individual titles, I'll refer to them by numbers. ----- 1.) she lays broken on the concrete staring at the sky how come from here things look so good?
2.) it's funny how when the sun shines the blues and greens intensify
3.) sing me love songs and hold my hand things don't always have to be so goddamn hard we have it easy
4.) sometimes you lose things 'cause you have a hole in your pocket maybe that's how i lost you
5.) out by the border where the coyotes run that's where things get hard
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Post by Queen of Rain on Oct 29, 2006 3:19:57 GMT -8
brilliant my dear... the way every poem stands on is own yet simultaneoulsy holds the same imagery and theme as the rest. Think last line of 3rd could need an extra syllable or two and maybe a more sophisticated word than easy?
and dear, last stanza is perfection!
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