Life's A Dance

[ScarletMornings]

Don’t worry about what you don’t know
you gain nothing by trying to change what you cannot
striving and grasping and struggling and failing
reaching for something unattainable or already lost
fret not for all you don’t understand or foresee
hopelessness breeds bitter sorrow and unhappiness
life will come
a misstep is forgiven with time
learn the patterns, memorize the motions
but always expect surprises in the steps
ever evolving, yet ever the same
the qualities of eternity
Life’s a dance you learn as you go

I never lost you
you hurled goodbyes on arrowpaths to my heart
just watch me walk away
you imagine you granted me the power
I’ll save face and pretend you did
you seem so hurt but yours will pass
life is long to live dead
I will know
I met you and knew my heart’s intent
a blatant message to prepare to shatter
yet the show (the dance) must go on
you seemed sincere and perhaps you believe you are
time makes the truth known
and yet the fine art of aging runs both ways in verification
I figure you’ll figure it out eventually
so I won’t ask do you understand
but I am going to wonder
if you will know
You cannot lose that which you never possessed

It’s better to love and lose
they urge me to move along
pick up the threads of the music and waltz on
sew the jagged edges of my broken heart
with the violinist’s needle-thin bow
I grasp at pretty straws laid to blunt the rhythms of the floor
while I'm still deaf to the sounds of all
but the beat of patched heartbeats
I hear pianoforte
it seems you’ve faded and left nothing but scars
you haunt me constantly yet live in prosperity
you’ve picked up your beat and found the new tempo
wisdom is really not such an asset
especially when you don’t want to be right
amazing how broken hearts can fill you up on the inside
and somehow never outwardly show
they never would’ve suspected, I believe,
if they didn’t already know how she tried and failed
a bittersweet girl
Rather than to never love at all

All’s fair
yet somehow the years wear by
that outward semblance of calm serves you in good stead
eventually the hazy cloud of pain clears
and you can see the beauty in the breakdown of your experience
I sit on the front porch and watch the light gild the dancing leaves
contentment inherent in all expressions
people find splendor in my wisdom
and I thank them while I wonder what else
yet all their faces tell and ask me the same thing
what else is there?
yet that ache never really goes away
and they always seem to pick that song to play
fingers arch and follow an elusive, soulful melody
that haunts an empty heart with a peaceful façade
they seek and wonder what I'm hiding
and still I'm striving and trying and struggling inside
to keep it alive, to let it all go
time may soften and blur so it’s all indistinct
or sharpen and focus so it burns like yesterday
regardless, your heart never lets you forget
who you are
in love and in war

And still they’ll tell you
and heed them well
for I suppose they’re right
a lucky overhearing that’s a universal truth
though it never may be understood
until you waltz that waltz
discover the pattern and dynamics of the song of your heartbeat
it pounds true
make mistakes and live to regret them and appreciate them
dip into an unexpected clasp and swing into some surprising turns
and don’t be surprised if you don’t know all the steps, all the words
partner your spirit with your heart
and be true to yourself in the end
don't be afraid to just believe
find peace while inside you still are grasping for your dreams
broken or unrealized or yearned for or forgotten
and when you finally close the book, your song wrote
remember one thing
Life’s a dance you learn as you go

[cry,crayola.]

hmm.... i'm a tad confused. i just woke up and am listening to rocket summer [lovehim] so i'll come back to this when i'm a little more sane.

and what are you doing up at 7:27? don't tell me you woke up that early! that'd be a first...

[ScarletMornings]

anybody? anybody at all?? please?

[ScarletMornings]

i know this format is really strange, but i really liked it? anybody got anything AT ALL on it? what i was trying to do was use like famous sayings, starting the stanza with the first part of it and then write about them, and then end the line with the second half of the saying, but make it so it's like you could read it with the stanza between the italicized sayings. does that make any sense at all?

[Queen of Rain]

i do have a problem with long poems with long stanzas.. jst not enough air kinda.. i jsut lose my focus cos in the night im too unfocused and during dahys its too warm.. but ill try to get some decent comment down later today...

[ScarletMornings]

okay i'm gonna cheat again and move this up by commenting on it because i'd REALLY love SOMEONE to actually tell me if they hate it or love it or if it sucks or if it's just okay. please?

[Ramona]

Hmmm...oddly enough I thought i commented on this already.
Anyway...
On the fpoem, as a whole:
Your rhythm was just perfect. Though I do think it was kind of plain, because I read it thinking to myself that it flowed excellently, but I didn't retain the information.

I agree with Queen of Rain about the long poems with long stanzas. So my only suggestions on the entire poem are to break it up a little bit and spice up the language some in the first half.