She travelled over the ocean

[Queen of Rain]

I lied to her over and over again
I told her that no one
would like her in this country
because they only fall
for blondes
here
yes I lied and lied because I was there
and I liked her
a lot
and I lied to her
Said I would not
miss her
when she got on
that nighttrain to Berlin

I guess I loved her
I just wanted her to see me
and tell me who I was

Yet with my entire history
to hide and enstrange
I turned my back to her
to make her go away

before she decided to stay
and become just like me

[ScarletMornings]

the diction of this is simple, but rather effective since the WHOLE poem is written that way. i like how the narrator tells what happens so carelessly, it seems. it puts a lot of emotion to it from my persepective. it a simple but moving poem for me, and i like it. the title fits very well too. its simple and to the point- like the poem.

[Ramona]

I, like Scarletmornings, admire the diction of this piece because it seems that the narrator is so careless in his/her love. But I think there could be more imagery added while keeping the simple feel of the poem. This way seems a bit plain.

[Queen of Rain]

Thank you guys.. I really agree wýth that ýt needs more ýmagery.. Ill see when I get týme to work on ýt

[Robin]

Yeah, I like the simple diction but it is a little plain. I agree with what's been said already.