wondering note

[shadowsglory]

I walk the streets at 3:15 pm each day.
Wondering,pondering the road I chose.
Why did I choose to join this game?
Why did I choose to be the best?
Why am I tall? Why am I built?
I look at myself and begin to cry.
My life changed even when I resisted.
My mind set has been dimished.
I am independent and strong through this all.
Nothing is going to change that.

[Ramona]

First line was cool, 'cause it kind of gives an OCD feel to it. The second line makes it sound more cliche, but then it gets better. The end feels very abrupt, and I think your use of language was too blunt. What I mean is that you could just describe things more and allude to what they are without saying outright what it is or what the character feels, if that makes any sense.