Rejuvenate

[Robin]

I guess I really like the word 'rejuvenate.'

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Stretch your stem towards the light,
Spread out your crampèd leaves.
Let your petals grow and colors bloom:
Rejuvenate, rejuvenate, rejuvenate.

Come back from winter’s deadly grip,
Shed all your crumpled leaves.
Let your leaves and new life grow:
Rejuvenate, rejuvenate, rejuvenate.

Cut your hair and dye it red,
Spread pink onto your lips.
Soot your lashes, dust your lids:
Rejuvenate, rejuvenate, rejuvenate.

Unfold your skin and stretch your lips,
Dye all your gray hairs blonde.
Restore your color and your life:
Rejuvenate, rejuvenate, rejuvenate.

[Ramona]

I like the evolution of this poem. However, the repetition of "rejuvenate" seems like it's just too much in this poem. Perhaps changing it to just one-word repetition at the end of each stanza would make it better. Though the flow would be disrupted.