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Post by Pseudomuse on Jan 25, 2006 15:48:37 GMT -8
flowers for charlie
[dad]
I laid down flopped flowers on your grave yesterday, the sky a different shade of blue than the last.
I find white mice everywhere now, especially in the kitchen. it’s an infiltration of the masses. white scurrying balls of fluff.
home from work on your death-day, a little brown female was curled in the milk jar. I petted her and fed her from my hand. the poor creature kept running into walls.
I named her charlie just for you. she buries herself in my breast, when the others, the white mob closes in. only there does she calm, the shudder-stutter of her little beating mouse heart.
I laid flopped flowers on your grave today, thinking maybe I should just stop drawing analogies between the mice and the maze.
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Post by Ramona on Jan 26, 2006 8:52:26 GMT -8
I love the last stanza and the idea of it. It reminded me of Flowers for Algernon because of the white mice and the title.
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Post by cry,crayola. on Jan 26, 2006 15:01:03 GMT -8
flowers for algernon! that's what i was thinking of all through this. is it about that? jw.
brilliant job. i love love love the last stanza
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Post by darktears on Jan 26, 2006 16:55:19 GMT -8
I love the last stanza, though I love the whole poem. But I absouletly love the last stanze, Nice job.
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Post by somewhatpoetic on Jan 26, 2006 19:50:28 GMT -8
i must agree with everyone else about the last stanza...but i really love the whole peom...niiiiiice!
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Post by Pseudomuse on Jan 26, 2006 21:31:23 GMT -8
Yep Flowers for Algernon all the way!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2006 14:44:51 GMT -8
woo. read that story last year and i almost cried in class!! this is a fantastic poem. i love it and i love the emotion and the analogies! great job!
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Post by mswrite on Jan 28, 2006 9:05:10 GMT -8
it made me think of Flowers for Algernon as well. Which reminds me that I need to read that again. but anyways, I love your poem. Especially the second to last stanza, I just...like it.
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