the epigone, I

[Pseudomuse]

so going back to my epic greek roots. *conspiratol wink* with Scarlet. This is a poem in parts, this is just the first.

PM

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the epigone

I.

((antigone))

she dreams of icarus-wings
so he paints them there
gold-leaf-feather-tips fluttering
in the slight breeze.

the waft of spice flecks mingle on
tongues as she drinks her fill of him
and takes flight.

(he tastes of bleeding heart humility,
and burning bark.)

crashing, splatting, arms wide into
the sun she goes, and fractures in
many variegated sun-shards

falling back, he gathers her up
bearing her cuts like
fragmented window pane glass
on his own malleable body. the older ones
merely white cat scratches against his tan.

fastening her back together with an artist’s
touch, he breathes life into her again,
letting the wax drip-drip-drip in places where
their naked flesh meets.

(she feels like new trousers, taught and lax
in all the right places. she tastes like new
delphian spring.)

he craves to wed her to the ground
but one look, a small smile, has him
reaching for the paint pot again.

(he understands, memories are not hers
to keep.)

he, for all his wonders, cannot compete
with gods.

[ScarletMornings]

oooooooh! i looooove conspiracies!! And i LOOOOOVE your epic greek roots! and i'm ridiculously happy you have come back to them!!! and i ADORE this poem. well, so far! yayayayayayayayaya! yay for greek!!!!! yay for pm!!!! JUST YAY FOR THIS POEM! WOO HOO!!

[Robin]

A lot of the stuff in this piece disturbed me. I know you aren't actually saying Antigone and Icarus poked, but it just...disturbed me. I'm a canon type of person, and hearing the couple in this poem referred to as Antigone craving icarus wings just upset me. I think that when writing with heavy mythological allusions, one should stick to the original myths. You did, but you sort of bent them until they were touching each other. It's a good poem, very well written, don't get me wrong, but the ideas and ways you used to portray this were a little eccentric.

[Pseudomuse]

hmmm...didn't think of that originally, the myth twisting. I used antigone as the part title because of the allusion that this girl is hanging herself by indulging in her pratices. thank you for bringing it to my attention, the bending, when the whole poem is finished I'll take a look at it again, as a whole I might change titles, pear down things a bit.

Scarlet, yay! anywho....

working on the second and third parts.

[Ramona]

I don't know, I'd have to disgree with Robin. I think the eccentric twisting of the myths makes the poem better. Then again, I do love eccentricites. I really adored this poem. HoF?

[Pseudomuse]

ooo yay! HoF, do you really have to ask? I haven't decided to change it yet, waiting to finishing the entire thing. Danke!

PM

[Ramona]

Yes, I just feel odd if I don't ask, though I've never had anyone say no.