Post by cry,crayola. on Dec 24, 2005 9:36:58 GMT -8
this band on my finger will stay.
everyone says your gone,
but i don't believe it.
you're just...
away.
our son tells me to just step outside
they've made a lovely grave for you.
made with hard marble
and a beautiful parting message.
to one who will always be loved
and who always loved us.
we miss you, dear father,
dear husband
but i wont believe them
i refuse!
the people at work think i'm crazy
and there's too many men wanting to take your spot.
well, they can't have it!
but, darling, hurry back.
i can only drink so much coffee.
you will come back won't you?
he did.
that's all that darn penelope can talk about.
her brave soldier on his white stead.
battling for her.
just for her.
you'll battle for me, right?
i'm waiting here.
just as i have been for the past years.
in our little apartment.
you always promised me a house.
you won't break your promise, will you?
i haven't broken mine.
they say you disappeared after the wreck.
a lot of payments we made on that car.
there's still so many more to go.
you never believed in insurance.
i didn't believe you'd leave me alone.
but you won't
you aren't, are you?
no.
you're just...
away.
just like him
everyone says your gone,
but i don't believe it.
you're just...
away.
our son tells me to just step outside
they've made a lovely grave for you.
made with hard marble
and a beautiful parting message.
to one who will always be loved
and who always loved us.
we miss you, dear father,
dear husband
but i wont believe them
i refuse!
the people at work think i'm crazy
and there's too many men wanting to take your spot.
well, they can't have it!
but, darling, hurry back.
i can only drink so much coffee.
you will come back won't you?
he did.
that's all that darn penelope can talk about.
her brave soldier on his white stead.
battling for her.
just for her.
you'll battle for me, right?
i'm waiting here.
just as i have been for the past years.
in our little apartment.
you always promised me a house.
you won't break your promise, will you?
i haven't broken mine.
they say you disappeared after the wreck.
a lot of payments we made on that car.
there's still so many more to go.
you never believed in insurance.
i didn't believe you'd leave me alone.
but you won't
you aren't, are you?
no.
you're just...
away.
just like him
*sighs* i'm afraid this isn't much better from the original. constructive crit. please. oh! and queen.... my cap button on my computer is broken, so i can't really cap. anything unless its all in caps and that's just bleh.
i don't really like the second to last stanza. does it feel out of place to anyone else?
