Untitled 11-02-05

[Pseudomuse]

Another Sylvia Plath inspired piece.

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Untitled 11-02-05

she finds herself beneath
the waves that ripple across
the expansive, open sea
her skin pickled from the
briney immersion

she's tried to kill herself before
something only small-child-spaces
know of

the long white sleeves of her dress
weigh her down
and the gathering storm of
suffocation breaches through
a wall of calm thoughts

I won't be here in the morning
she tells herself letting the pressure
swallow her whole

[Ramona]

I like this, but in the last stanza, I thought it might flow better if it was like this:
"I won't be here in the morning
she tells herself
letting the pressure
swallow her whole"

But that is my only criticism.