To Ash

[ScarletMornings]

this is for my friend ashley.

You keep watching the world
waiting for that one day
when in one miraculous flash
it will all come true
like some fairy tale
where the maiden sits in the tower
and the prince comes riding out of nowhere
and becomes her lovesalvation
the same cliche, but desirable,
happy ending

And I sit back
and watch you
and I don't understand sometimes
because you're settling for so much less, it seems
and me?
I'm so picky it seems like it'll never come
and I don't even expect it anymore
but you just keep looking at the horizon
waiting for that distant speck to grow
swell and burst into the perfect ending
you've been wasting your life looking for

And I'm trying to tell you
my friend
why I think you should just go for it
shake off the passive
the somewhat discontent
peace
you're living in
forget the fairy tale
in reality, they didn't end happy
just sugarcoated for those who need to think so

this is my gift to you
and I hope you really like it
not like those presents you get
where you smile and say "Oh, thanks, that's great"
and then secretly toss it in the trash
because it comes from my heart
the restless heart that wants so much for you
so much more than a fairytale

and if you agree with me
then maybe that one day will come
one day when the words are suddenly there
and the emotion and the passion I want for you
they'll all just come together
one day, I'm hoping is coming soon
when you'll sunburst through that horizon
and come looking for it
one day
when the cliché is gone

[Ramona]

Very nice, very nice. I absolutely love this.

[cry,crayola.]

it seems a bit wordy to me, in some places. i'll have to reread this one. hmmmm.........

all in all, though, i did like it.

[onemoremile]

I'd love to sit and review this, but I can't. I can't comment on poems that I know are aimed at a specific person, because I know I can never understand the true concept and I could never understand the full depth of it. All I can say is that I wish I had a friend who'd write something like that for me.

[darktears]

Wow, this is very good, very nicely written, in some parts I just find it...awkward for some reason, but most of it, I think is splendid.