Never to be Loved

[somewhatpoetic]

ok..so i really like this one..but I'd like to know what everyone else thinks and if anyone has any suggestions....

Never to be Loved

How did you find me
when i had lost myself?
My savior in human form
and my destruction with a gentle face
How you crushed me with your critical convictions

"Guilty!", I cry, "but is it my fault?"
Your ghastly stare condemns me in an instant
Salty rivers be dammed till he goes!
Surprised but not shocked at the reaction
thats what I had expected all along
but was not as prepared as planned

Learned from life's mistakes
my secret is safely secured away
Never too intimate I flee fearing
the worlds worst humiliation
I look in the mirror ashamed,
How can this coward be me?

[Ramona]

I like this, love this line:
"and my destruction with a gentle face"

[cry,crayola.]

ghastly stare.......... i like it.
i really like this. it's pretty nifty, if you ask me.

[ScarletMornings]

i think this is fantastic. you have some pretty dang amazing lines in here. i esp. like
Salty rivers be dammed till he goes!
Surprised but not shocked at the reaction
thats what I had expected all along
but was not as prepared as planned

very great job, i really love this.