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dusk
Dec 7, 2005 20:11:56 GMT -8
Post by cry,crayola. on Dec 7, 2005 20:11:56 GMT -8
climbing down his chair set in gold high above all else but sinking ever so noble, of course dignity filling his motions as he makes way for the stars to climb the sky but he brings beauty to the world absolute magnificence. as the final rays of glory end the day. the sunbaked sky slowly becomes dark almost black now. and as the stars take the sky, dusk's day is retired
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dusk
Dec 7, 2005 20:12:29 GMT -8
Post by cry,crayola. on Dec 7, 2005 20:12:29 GMT -8
i don't really like this one. i think it's bleh. ah well. constructive crit. please!
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dusk
Dec 7, 2005 20:16:27 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Dec 7, 2005 20:16:27 GMT -8
i think this is beautiful and wonderfully descriptive. the words and diction are soo vivid. i just really love this. and give me props for sunbaked!!! lol i just can see this gloriously bright golden figure climbing down his throne and it just is a magnificent metaphor for the sunset. i love the whole thing.
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dusk
Dec 7, 2005 20:17:39 GMT -8
Post by cry,crayola. on Dec 7, 2005 20:17:39 GMT -8
k, SARA GETS MUCHO MUCHO PROPS FOR GIVING ME THE WORD SUNBAKED!
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dusk
Dec 8, 2005 9:34:43 GMT -8
Post by Ramona on Dec 8, 2005 9:34:43 GMT -8
I really do like this, the imagery is very descriptive without being overwhelming and without being too subtle.
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