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Post by Confusion on Dec 6, 2005 13:59:06 GMT -8
The greed
The hunger
The more they cry
The guilty scream
Upon us
We hold beneath us:
No space for love
No space for hate
No space for all
We commiserate
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Post by Confusion on Dec 6, 2005 13:59:51 GMT -8
i think this is rubbish.. but taking scarletmornings advice i am writing as much as possible to try and clear my writers block... all comments much appreciated!
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Post by cry,crayola. on Dec 6, 2005 16:26:25 GMT -8
yay! you're back! great way to liven up my day! woo! ok, now that that's over (she's back, she's back! ok, i'm done)
i think this has a great idea and great potential, it just needs to be explained a little more. a little more detailic. i like the way you set it up though. awesomeness. SHE'S BACK!!!!!!!
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Post by Confusion on Dec 7, 2005 8:27:18 GMT -8
hehe, thanxxx!!!!!!
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Post by Ramona on Dec 7, 2005 8:49:03 GMT -8
Hmmm, I really like this but I think maybe you could add more enriching details in it, but I really like it (commiserate=one of my fave words.)
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