Roses

[roxiecheerchika]

hey, i wrote this poem last year and I just needed your guys input...Its really childish and has basically no meaning..just kinda wanted some thoughts.

Roses climbing up my wall
headed to my window
growing up, up, up to the sky
petals reaching up so high
thorns extended trying to stand
while roots firmly grounded in the land
leaves falling unto the road
as if to signal some secrret code
all the while i lay i bed
the scent of roses by my head
I rest my fitful days,
my wiery ways,
there i lie dead dead dead'

[Confusion]

I like it!!! I dunno if there is, as you say, no meaning behind it... but to me there seems a very deep meaning.... i think the ending is too abrupt though

i dunno why but i can imagine it ending 'the scent of roses by my head, I rest my fitful days, my wiery ways, there i lie dead dead dead'
But i dunno if you would want to use that... depends if you want it to be dark poem or not!

[roxiecheerchika]

lol...wel it does have some meaning...Just to some it seems childish and cutesy...oh well.. and acutally i really like that ending....i would love to use it if you'd lend it to me?

[Confusion]

sure, i only thought it up on the spot thinking it would suit your poem, it's yours!!!

[roxiecheerchika]

thank you soo much...i really like it...

[Confusion]

You're very welcome!! Great poem!