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Wonder Jul 3, 2005 12:20:31 GMT -8

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Post by Ramona on Jul 3, 2005 12:20:31 GMT -8

Okay, this one was basically something I created while looking through Fragments for unfinished ideas. It was spawned off the word 'wonder' and I don't really think it's any great masterpice, but I do think it's nice for using simple language to convey a vague idea of a complex thought. It's supposed to be about someone who's not sure of their significant other's intentions, or it ould be about someone who's not sure of their child's mind, or a number of other things, but the first was the root concept.

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I wonder why
The heavens sigh,
The ocean meets blue sky.

I wonder why
Some people lie,
Some souls choose to die.

I wonder why,
I search your eyes,
To prove that you are mine.

"Hold my head inside your hands.
I need someone who understands.
I need someone, someone who hears.
For you I've waited all these years.

For you I'd wait 'til kingdom come,
Until my day, my day is done.
And say you'll come and set me free.
Just say you'll wait, you'll wait for me."

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	Wonder Jul 3, 2005 21:27:55 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Jul 3, 2005 21:27:55 GMT -8 very simplistic and sweet. i enjoyed that and the fact that it can be used in more than one context. very nice.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Wonder Jul 4, 2005 3:04:11 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on Jul 4, 2005 3:04:11 GMT -8 i realli like this!!! short and sweet.
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Ramona Administration Posts: 1,323	Wonder Jul 5, 2005 14:55:59 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Ramona on Jul 5, 2005 14:55:59 GMT -8 Thank you both.
	"Hold my head inside your hands. I need someone who understands. I need someone, someone who hears. For you I've waited all these years. For you I'd wait 'til kingdom come, Until my day, my day is done. And say you'll come and set me free. Just say you'll wait, you'll wait for me."

Ramona Administration Posts: 1,323	Wonder Jul 5, 2005 14:56:43 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Ramona on Jul 5, 2005 14:56:43 GMT -8 Ha ha I'm so lame, I only have 2 karma and everyone else has, like, 10 or 11 or 12 or something.
	"Hold my head inside your hands. I need someone who understands. I need someone, someone who hears. For you I've waited all these years. For you I'd wait 'til kingdom come, Until my day, my day is done. And say you'll come and set me free. Just say you'll wait, you'll wait for me."

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Wonder Jul 5, 2005 23:43:09 GMT -8

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Post by Queen of Rain on Jul 5, 2005 23:43:09 GMT -8

i love the condensation of this idea, it really emphasises the multiple meanings within it.. i think you should check line 3, i feel there is a poause that disturbs the rhtyhm after "meets", then i think "some people lie" feels like such a infantile question compared to the other philosophy in this poem..

A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Wonder Jul 6, 2005 7:14:12 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on Jul 6, 2005 7:14:12 GMT -8 aww, i exalted you free-spirited!! i think most people are between 0 - 2 in karma... scarletmornings and i have exalted each other a few times..
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	Wonder Jul 6, 2005 19:45:17 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Jul 6, 2005 19:45:17 GMT -8 a FEW times? wanna try like nine or ten?lol i'll exalt you free spirited!
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

roxiecheerchika Guest	Wonder Jul 11, 2005 11:06:33 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by roxiecheerchika on Jul 11, 2005 11:06:33 GMT -8 simple and sweet...not much more to say....you kept it simple yet still got the meaning through...i like it alot!

Post by Ramona on Jul 3, 2005 12:20:31 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on Jul 3, 2005 21:27:55 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on Jul 4, 2005 3:04:11 GMT -8

Post by Ramona on Jul 5, 2005 14:55:59 GMT -8

Post by Ramona on Jul 5, 2005 14:56:43 GMT -8

Post by Queen of Rain on Jul 5, 2005 23:43:09 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on Jul 6, 2005 7:14:12 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on Jul 6, 2005 19:45:17 GMT -8

Post by roxiecheerchika on Jul 11, 2005 11:06:33 GMT -8