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Post by Queen of Rain on Jun 26, 2005 13:06:30 GMT -8
Tequila Sunrise
Tender kiss
of stranger’s
lips
Dawn-apporach
Arise
Arose
Arosen
Morning hour
From mosque a pray
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Bodies keeping
eachother
warm
sunrise sunrise
on youngish cheeks
on maybe-to-be-lovers
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the smell of sea sand and salt
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Come come
take my hand
and maybe tomorrow
we’ll have that drink
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Post by Ramona on Jun 26, 2005 14:15:59 GMT -8
I don't think arosen is a word. Anyways, I loved the concept of this poem, and your descriptions were great.
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Post by Queen of Rain on Jun 27, 2005 0:19:18 GMT -8
it is in my sisters grammar book.. it was one of those meaningless verbformations one have to memorise in 6th grade... its like "begin, began, begun"...
im glad u liked the poem, i hope the various feelings i had when writing it comes forward and after analysis one get something more out of it...
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Post by Confusion on Jun 27, 2005 7:29:12 GMT -8
i like this!! Nice ans simple, my fav bit is Arise Arose Arosen, that just goes so well!!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 27, 2005 22:54:03 GMT -8
do u listen to the eagles by any chance? i loved this a lot. it was very beautiful, and i think u did a great job. i liked
Come come
take my hand and maybe tomorrow
we’ll have that drink
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Post by Queen of Rain on Jun 28, 2005 2:33:39 GMT -8
no i dont listen to eagles.. this poem was really jsut about my experiences and thoughts in Turkey.. im unsure if people get that the drink i talk about in the last line isnt a Tequila Sunrise...  i had quite a lot fun writing this poem.. |
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 28, 2005 22:08:37 GMT -8
oh. i guess living in sweden, i should have considered u might not have heard of the eagles. they sing a song called tequilla sunrise and it's kind of similar to this.
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Post by Pseudomuse on Jun 28, 2005 22:16:56 GMT -8
so preetyfull. yep yep I'm back, trying to make up for the time I was away from you guys. arosen is probably arisen but since all of it is poetic liscence than it doesn't really matter. there is also a theory out there that states that if the word can be understood by the context then it is a word. well great poem. and I heart the eagles so yeah very nice. I had this image of sunbursts as I read it.
PM
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Post by Queen of Rain on Jun 30, 2005 7:06:14 GMT -8
glad u liked it guys.. i get the taste of Tequila sunrises and Sex on the beaches when i read it now and actaully none of the drinks are my favorites.. but i want my reader to feel the sun rising and i hope that succeeded..
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Post by Confusion on Jun 30, 2005 11:54:22 GMT -8
it did indeed!! good job!  |
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 30, 2005 14:52:20 GMT -8
you can drink???
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Post by Queen of Rain on Jul 1, 2005 0:42:09 GMT -8
well im 17, so not legally in sweden, but yes this was in turkey where i was on vacation adn no one cares about ID there...
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jul 1, 2005 21:07:33 GMT -8
woooow. I think i need to visit turkey.
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i had quite a lot fun writing this poem..
