Peotry

[roxiecheerchika]

Hey, well i'm just writing a poem, of course, so it might not make sense b/c its being worked on, but i'd really luv some suggestions along the way. Thanx alot ya'll!

Silent whispers
glding through the night
wrapped in blankets
pulled tight
to keep the cold from seeping in
throught the open window
awaiting a lover
from ages gone by

okay thats all i can write now? does it seem like nonsense or do u think it could become a good poem?

[Queen of Rain]

spellcheck, but other than that perfect rhyming.. next line i wud recomend to contain some sort of imagery or its risk of you getting blabby, very interesting so far..

[Ramona]

Your rhythm is a bit off, and, yes, it is unclear and kind of wordy, but I imagine that you are going to add more. Whehter in between or after, i don't know, but I suggest in between.