Kiss the darkness

Confusion
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Kiss the darkness May 22, 2005 5:28:48 GMT -8

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Post by Confusion on May 22, 2005 5:28:48 GMT -8

Kiss the darkness
You know it'll always be there
With you
Your only companion
Forever watching
Over you

Kiss the shadows
You know they haunt you
Your addiction

Kiss my mind
I'll be yours tonight
One night
Our night
Your passion

Kiss the hours of darkness
I'll leave you
Gone

Kiss my shadow
I'll leave you
Gone

Last Edit: May 22, 2005 13:12:08 GMT -8 by Confusion

"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Queen of Rain Senior Writer I'm Swedish, that should explain it all.. Posts: 614	Kiss the darkness May 22, 2005 9:19:19 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Queen of Rain on May 22, 2005 9:19:19 GMT -8 ooo excellent idea... i think you could make the stanzas a bit longer since it otherwise becomes a bit to repetitive.. excellent connection between the symbols... loveliiii
	A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Kiss the darkness May 22, 2005 13:07:45 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on May 22, 2005 13:07:45 GMT -8 Thanx! ;D yea i get what you mean, it was just a rough idea of the poem so far... lotsa editing to do, ill do that tomorrow, when im less asleep. nite
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Kiss the darkness May 22, 2005 13:13:27 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on May 22, 2005 13:13:27 GMT -8 so i said id edit it tomorow... but i sorta did some just now. ..... i think there is probs still some more needing editing, ill do that tomorow, but what do you think to it atm?
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	Kiss the darkness May 23, 2005 14:13:42 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on May 23, 2005 14:13:42 GMT -8 i really like it. i guess you could make some editing , but i can't find what.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	Kiss the darkness May 23, 2005 14:13:57 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on May 23, 2005 14:13:57 GMT -8 very cool idea, by the way.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Kiss the darkness May 24, 2005 7:08:16 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on May 24, 2005 7:08:16 GMT -8 Thanx! ;D ;D yea, i think im probs gonna leave it like this!!
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Post by Confusion on May 22, 2005 5:28:48 GMT -8

Post by Queen of Rain on May 22, 2005 9:19:19 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on May 22, 2005 13:07:45 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on May 22, 2005 13:13:27 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on May 23, 2005 14:13:42 GMT -8

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Post by Confusion on May 24, 2005 7:08:16 GMT -8