You will never see this

[Confusion]

You will never see this
But how I wish you could

A guise of contentment
False smiles

Fooling myself
Fooling you
Fooling everyone

You see my face
And that I can change
Hide away true feelings
For a false sweetness
A false beauty

You should have looked at my eyes
Even the palest of complexion
Cannot give innocence to my eyes
Dark endless pits

My eyes tell the story
The story of you and me

You'll never see my soul
You'll never see it
Bruised and broken

I wish you saw me lying here
I wish you saw me crying here

Fixated on you
In love with you

See what you've done
You've broken me

[Confusion]

no comments at all?...... i didnt think this one was so bad...

[Queen of Rain]

4th and 5th stanzaq are PERFECT! em title is amazing, its exactly that way you feel when experienceing the feelings in this poem.. however you could work on language and imagery cos especially the first stanzas are very "chatty", its just too much text and too little poetry in them and that becomes weird in contrast to the masterpiecie in the above mentione stanzas...

[Ramona]

I love the whole "you'll never see this" thing. It's so true, how a lot of peopel want people to see things they consider secretive. It had good rhythm, too.

[Confusion]

Thanx!

ive edited it a bit now, i think its a bit better than before but maybe there is still more i could do??