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Post by Pseudomuse on Dec 21, 2004 20:26:06 GMT -8
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Sobs trickled through the wall of wood. Deep, crooning cries spun in tendrils in the stagnant air. David huddled, knees creating a resting platform for his chin, and attempted to banish the sounds from his mind. The keening wails and incoherent babble that came from behind the planks pulled and tugged at him, wanting words of kindness and comfort not the silence that spanned between them. The desperate cries went unanswered and David would leave them that way because boy’s don’t cry.
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Long, emerald strands of grass tickled his nose, while the corners of his lips turned up at the ends. The boy -- more the young man, heaved a deep sigh his chest undulating as he did so. Lying in the shade of a giant oak, David rested shirtless on his back cooling his soppy, dripping skin from the festering heat. While he lay there soft grass brushing his tanned torso, a mirage appeared before him. Maybe it was because of the heat or his overactive imagination but the figure molded lifelike before him. Blinking his eyes quickly, David realized who the figure was as it smiled back, perfect white teeth flashing. David choked back a sob, tears tingeing the back of his eyes. David blinked again, the image was gone. He willed his tears to stop, and his mouth to close, because boy’s don’t cry.
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Post by frontpagenews on Dec 23, 2004 8:09:48 GMT -8
I think this piece is quite neat. It portrays very well the way guys are "supposed" to act. I quite enjoyed reading this. Ya know it would make a good poem.
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Post by behindTHEmask on Dec 23, 2004 14:03:54 GMT -8
I love the piece. The description. The way that it's worded.
It's awesome.
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Post by Sparks on Dec 23, 2004 19:15:26 GMT -8
It's really sad. Sweet. Great work.
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Post by Pseudomuse on Dec 23, 2004 21:14:14 GMT -8
thanx you guys i feel warm and tingly inside now. this is actually part of a whole gigantic thingie im writing. ill post somemore soon.
~Pseudomuse
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