Here we are frozen tears

[Queen of Rain]

Here we are frozen tears


Here we are ---
Nothing much
I think of white clouds
To forget your smile
It’s so empty
Walls are so white
And halls so long
Scarlet skies with jet streaks
Like your fingers on my arm

They could not be
Breath was too chilling
And I’m not warm enough
Time is so cruel
Oh I could not feel the trembling touch
And now it’s gone
Frozen tears and vacant whispers

Loneliness is not suffer
Yet memories make me shiver
Things are so beautiful gone
Frozen photo-smiles
Emptiness is

Icebergs growing
We left the ship
Empty wrecks
Photo-smiles frozen
Here we are
Frozen Tears
Colder days to come

[saralioness]

very charged with pain. I don't know if I like the no rhyming thing, but it would make it good song if you had a piano and a slow, sweet tune.

[Queen of Rain]

I almsot aleways write without rhyming, I prefer free form poetry...

howevert the pain... I tried to depict emptiness, and it gets painful.. I dont know how to revise that to emphasise that loneliness is no suffer... yet portray that empty feeling i have inside..

[Ramona]

It was very intense. I liked the 'frozen photo-smiles' phrase.

[behindTHEmask]

Gorgeous. Beautiful. Full of immense passion.

"Loneliness is not suffer
Yet memories make me shiver
Things are so beautiful gone
Frozen photo-smiles
Emptiness is."

That was what stood out to me.
Brilliant.