Guilty ways

[Confusion]

Lord rise, the nightfall
My misty clouds
My phase

Lord rise, surrender
Your mighty power
My guilty ways

Lord rise, my grieving
Yours I am, forever
State my deadly sins
Disprove my tales
Never shall you fail
Displace my fitful hail

Lord rise, dismay
Help me through
These dying days

Lord rise, forgive
Repent my sins
Swear, innovative innocence
Ponder through, this new born face
Bless me once more

Lord rise, the valley
My minds world
Dishonoured

Forever suffering
These dying days
My guilty ways

[Confusion]

this is different to anything else i have ever written, so im not sure about it..... it's the first religious piece ever for me!

please, please tell me your thoughts on this!

[ScarletMornings]

It kind of startled me, because this really is very different from what you seem to usually write about. However, I really, honestly, loved this. there is a simplistic, honest beauty to it. I think you did a great job. It was a very well done piece.

[Confusion]

thanx very much!!!! yea, it is sooooo different to what i have previously written about!! I tend to only be able to write poems about my own experiences... i think at the moment im sorta changing... and therefore so are the subjects of my poetry...

[ScarletMornings]

that's something i went through too. i went from rhyming, almost story telling poetry, to non rhyming, feelings poetry. strange transition for me.

[Confusion]

cool, i think it's good when people's poetry reflects them, at the time