Angels of Phoenix

[Queen of Rain]

Like Phoenix I rose
From the ashes
The powers fighting
Within my soul
Are now my source
Of inspiration
My beauty, my pleasure, my love
Thanks to you

Angels form heaven
Smiles from childhood lost
Snowangels running
Tumbling around
Never falling

It is not faultless
Not a summersday
But my angels, my children
Welcome me to the world
I walked to the fire
That gave me strength
But a soul of splintered
Glass ripped

Birds in a wintersky
Appreciation of beauty
I’m home
My angels
My children
We are


This is a first draft, it needs revision, can you help??

[dominicmonaghan]

Wow, I'm not too good at helping people with poems, but I really enjoyed reading it. I love the topic and just the way you wrote it in general.

[Queen of Rain]

ok i have changed it to "walk through fire"

and then after glass ripped, added "Yet then came them druids, heal"

cos i felt sth was missing to mark the amazing entrance on my snowangels, (my angels of phoenix, my druids, my birds, my everything)...