Houses of Stone

[ScarletMornings]

This is one I wrote after I read a book with the same title by Barbara Michaels. Hope you like, but don't really care because it's like 1:35 am here in Oklahoma, and I'm dead on my feet and in my brain because I just finished a freaking persuasive essay. I hate them passionately, i've discovered. oh well, i hate most stuff this late. hope you enjoy!
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Silent, all is still,
for the cold freezes to the bone.
Dark, all is gray,
in my house of stone.

Lost, all is hidden,
for no one else can see.
Crazy, insane from solitude,
I can't be what I want to be.

Catch, I am falling,
consumed by my cold fury.
Grasp, hold me tight,
or I'll be swallowed by my worry.

Look, am I there,
or am I invisible and unseen?
Search, come find me,
don't let me disappear in those supreme.


Gone, locked tight inside,
by those who wish to cage.
Controlled, I am helpless,
and it's expected in this day and age.

Help, please save me,
someone has to understand.
Trapped, that's what's happening,
I am worthless because I'm not a man.

[dominicmonaghan]

That's really great! I loved the way the you started each first and third line, if what I said made sense. The rhythm is great, at least, in my opinion, and so is the rhyming. Good job!

[louise]

The first few verses are really strong and well written, but some where along the line you loose your power for the message. Although I really sympathise with the message, I think it is a shame it is ruining your poem a bit. And good luck on that paper. I share your feelings about them (had to write way too many papers lately) ;D

[ScarletMornings]

Thanks guys! ;D