Let us flee

Confusion
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Let us flee Jun 12, 2005 3:10:44 GMT -8

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Post by Confusion on Jun 12, 2005 3:10:44 GMT -8

Let us flee
Leave this place
I'm suffocating
On haunting memories
Forever imbedded
In this forsaken town

Let us flee
A place nobody knows us
I'll be whatever you want

Let us start again
Our wiry looks
Once again becoming
Smooth and supple
A baby’s skin
A baby’s eyes

Let us see the world as new
Again
At last

A bogus past
More than fine
A fresh start
Brand new

Let us flee
A place nobody knows us
I'll be whatever you want

"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Ramona Administration Posts: 1,323	Let us flee Jun 12, 2005 15:02:34 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Ramona on Jun 12, 2005 15:02:34 GMT -8 I especially like the last line, but the whole poem is pretty good.
	"Hold my head inside your hands. I need someone who understands. I need someone, someone who hears. For you I've waited all these years. For you I'd wait 'til kingdom come, Until my day, my day is done. And say you'll come and set me free. Just say you'll wait, you'll wait for me."

Confusion
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Posts: 518

Let us flee Jun 13, 2005 7:32:53 GMT -8

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Post by Confusion on Jun 13, 2005 7:32:53 GMT -8

thankyou!! the last line 'i'll be whatever you want' is something i thought of randomly a loong time ago, but i too like it a lot .. not realli sure why though.. i've used it in other poems too, i think there is one on this site that is from the same idea 'whatever way you want it, baby'

Thankyou for your nice comment!!

"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	Let us flee Jun 22, 2005 10:04:59 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:04:59 GMT -8 I liked it. Wonderful job!
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	Let us flee Jun 22, 2005 10:05:44 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:05:44 GMT -8 Our wiry looks Once again becoming Smooth and supple that was my favorite part, just by the way. it just kind of struck me. great imagery. plus i love the word wiry.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Let us flee Jun 23, 2005 8:42:30 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on Jun 23, 2005 8:42:30 GMT -8 thankyou!!
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Post by Confusion on Jun 12, 2005 3:10:44 GMT -8

Post by Ramona on Jun 12, 2005 15:02:34 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on Jun 13, 2005 7:32:53 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:04:59 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:05:44 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on Jun 23, 2005 8:42:30 GMT -8