Claire

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Claire Jun 12, 2005 3:08:00 GMT -8

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Post by Confusion on Jun 12, 2005 3:08:00 GMT -8

Claire, and her shiny mirror
Both, together
Each made of stone

Claire, and her rosy cheeks
No joy ever needed
To give Claire
Her fair maidens blush
That glowing flush

Claire, and her indulgent nature
Claire, and her throne
Lustful boys
They swam, for Claire
Lustful boys
She returned their affections
Claire, and her kisses
Deep in the red blood sea

But, Claire
This one loved you!
Yes, Claire
Not lust
Love

Claire, you were mistaken
To believe he cared of your visage
Your bogus ringlets
Your girlish grin
Your frequently used blusher brush

Somewhere beneath the surface
This boy found a soul
Found true peace
True love
True joy

His affections faltered
As you
As always
Had to answer
More lustful boys callings
Deep down in the blood filled sea

Claire, and her shiny mirror
Both, together
Each made of stone

Last Edit: Jul 14, 2005 9:23:18 GMT -8 by Confusion

"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Ramona Administration Posts: 1,323	Claire Jun 12, 2005 14:45:48 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Ramona on Jun 12, 2005 14:45:48 GMT -8 I liked how you repeated the beginning, and the meaning behind it, but maybe you could expand a bit mre on how the one boy acutally loved her. Other than that, it's beautiful.
	"Hold my head inside your hands. I need someone who understands. I need someone, someone who hears. For you I've waited all these years. For you I'd wait 'til kingdom come, Until my day, my day is done. And say you'll come and set me free. Just say you'll wait, you'll wait for me."

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Claire Jun 13, 2005 7:33:40 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on Jun 13, 2005 7:33:40 GMT -8 Thankyou!!!!! Yup, your idea sounds good, ill do that in a mo!
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	Claire Jun 22, 2005 10:04:05 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:04:05 GMT -8 I love it, but it does seem like it's a little short.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Claire Jun 23, 2005 8:41:43 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on Jun 23, 2005 8:41:43 GMT -8 Thanx, yea when i find some spare time im gonna do sticky wickets suggestion and extend the bit about the boy who loooved her. thanx for your lovely comments!
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Queen of Rain Senior Writer I'm Swedish, that should explain it all.. Posts: 614	Claire Jun 26, 2005 13:22:38 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Queen of Rain on Jun 26, 2005 13:22:38 GMT -8 i agree with former commetns... but i must say it is so amazing to see how especially you ideas have developed from a little clishé to these amazing unique masterpieces...
	A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Claire Jun 27, 2005 7:31:00 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on Jun 27, 2005 7:31:00 GMT -8 wow, thanx!! everyone here is sooo nice, you all have such nice comments !!!!!!! Yup, im gonna extend the bit bout the boy... i know i said that ages ago, but i will do it, just haven't had chance yet. thanx for all your lovely comments!
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Claire Jul 14, 2005 9:15:47 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on Jul 14, 2005 9:15:47 GMT -8 okay... so i know i said aaaaaaaaages and aaaaaaages ago that i would add that stanza bout the boy, but today, before i sign off, i will do that!!!
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Confusion Senior Writer Posts: 518	Claire Jul 14, 2005 9:23:47 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Confusion on Jul 14, 2005 9:23:47 GMT -8 done! added a couple of stanzas... i think maybe the ones ive added are a bit cliche.... what do you all think?
	"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

Post by Confusion on Jun 12, 2005 3:08:00 GMT -8

Post by Ramona on Jun 12, 2005 14:45:48 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on Jun 13, 2005 7:33:40 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:04:05 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on Jun 23, 2005 8:41:43 GMT -8

Post by Queen of Rain on Jun 26, 2005 13:22:38 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on Jun 27, 2005 7:31:00 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on Jul 14, 2005 9:15:47 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on Jul 14, 2005 9:23:47 GMT -8