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Post by BloodyTears on Jan 18, 2005 14:15:31 GMT -8
For Love
I would love for love, Hate for love, Stand my ground and wait for love.
I would forget for love, Forgive for love, Live and let live for love.
I would follow for love, Lead for Love, Bow down and agree for love.
I would scream for love, Call for love, I would take a trip and fall for love.
I would smile for love, Cry for love, Jump off the edge and fly for love.
I would give for love, Need for love, Cut my wrist and bleed for love.
I would die for love, Live for love, Walk away and say goodbye for love.
I would tie for love, Outsmart for love, Sacrifice all my torn heart for love.
I would do anything for love, Always for love, I will wait forever in days for love.
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Post by quilleh on Jan 18, 2005 14:43:47 GMT -8
Whaoh. *Applauds* Rad flow; rockin' sweet. I realllllly like it. ^_^
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Post by Sparks on Jan 19, 2005 13:28:57 GMT -8
I think that it had a great flow, too. One of those poems that bounces along pretty well...whether you were going for bouncing or not. Although, I'd have to say for me, the actual content was a bit cliche.
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Post by Pseudomuse on Jan 19, 2005 16:35:01 GMT -8
i really like this, good work. though at the very end, the meter got lost in itself in this line: I would do anything for love. I don't know how you could shorten it by a syable, but its just a thought. but overall this is very good.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 14:49:30 GMT -8
It was a really great poem, good, attentive rhythm, but it was a tiny bit cliche for me also.
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