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Post by quilleh on Jan 17, 2005 14:42:02 GMT -8
Salient loneliness,
Attractive after hordes.
You’ve shaken the cliques,
But their scent still clings to the air,
Like a moth to the blaze.
Nauseating you to the limit,
Sickness comes in washes,
Attenuating the character you held;
Abating the moral you tried to gain.
And the infections thrash you,
Beating your vitality into submission.
You’ve become my nobody,
Amid spirits diminished.
The conclusion has come,
To abash our oddities,
Our ending in loneliness.
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Post by Ramona on Jan 17, 2005 14:48:38 GMT -8
Radical poem. Had a lot of word combinations I loved, and that are seldom used in poetry, though they should be used more often.
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Post by quilleh on Jan 17, 2005 15:01:59 GMT -8
*Glomps you* Why thanks! Radical? Yayness...haven't heard anyone aside from myself use that word in ages. But anywho, I've been confused as wheather I should tone the S.A.T. vocab words down a bit, or not. ^_^
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Post by Ramona on Jan 17, 2005 15:07:26 GMT -8
I like it like that, but however you like.
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Post by quilleh on Jan 17, 2005 15:14:36 GMT -8
I think it shall remain as is, because I like it, even is it does boggle the illiterate. ^_^
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Post by behindTHEmask on Jan 27, 2005 17:47:36 GMT -8
I agree with Wicket, the word choice is awesome. It makes the poem stand out. Props.
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Post by quilleh on Jan 27, 2005 18:02:32 GMT -8
Thanks very much! I lurf getting positive feedback. *glomp*
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 27, 2005 19:30:52 GMT -8
Hmmm, i'm running out of variety words to tell you how much i like your poems. Can't you have just one flop so i don't feel like such a bad poet? I have tons of flops. geez, do you have any? amazing job once again. i think i like your poems so much because they actually sometimes have words i don't know. that's such a change from using words like superfluous, condone, condenscending, and infiltrate, and having people go "What language are you speaking?" Thank you, thank you, thank you for challenging my mind! May God bless you for that!
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Post by quilleh on Jan 28, 2005 14:02:06 GMT -8
Aww! Now, now...I have many flops, or at least to me I do. I wrote something up last night for a guild contest...I'll have to post it.
And I am most happy to challaenge your mind! Thats the only way it'll get smarter. Heh. XD
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jan 28, 2005 15:16:35 GMT -8
kewl. ;D
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Post by kaidanasnan on Jan 29, 2005 5:45:41 GMT -8
It is awesome.
Good thing you aren't toning down the vocab. I understood every word of it except 'salient' (aren't I special? ;D).
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Post by tchyarink on Jan 29, 2005 7:03:38 GMT -8
The words you used are just... amazing...  Such high vocab in one poem but it doesn't sound overwhelming or too-much--- it sounds good and descriptive. I'm sorry that I don't have such good vocab--- I can't write a good enough comment for you!! |
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Post by quilleh on Jan 29, 2005 21:32:17 GMT -8
Thanks so much Tchy.  I love to challenge my mind, and make others think as well. It helps us get smarter.
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Post by tchyarink on Jan 30, 2005 1:11:59 GMT -8
You're very welcome
~ From "Tchy" ;D
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Post by Queen of Rain on Feb 5, 2005 14:47:39 GMT -8
Thats what I call poetry. U handle both words and content in a worthy way.. thank you
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Such high vocab in one poem but it doesn't sound overwhelming or too-much--- it sounds good and descriptive.
I love to challenge my mind, and make others think as well. It helps us get smarter. 