Friends who talk

[Confusion]

Winds bellow
My fitful scream
'Betrayal'
I cry
Once said, too late

All loyalty disowned
I've become a prisoner
Owned by your sudden hatred
Your malicious lies

My constant wondering, sighs
'When did you learn to be so cruel?'
'Forgive me, for I know not where I have sinned'
I pray

Looking back
On your dictation of me
Scarce memories
My fitful scream
'Throw me a lifeline'
'You owe me a lifetime'

[Queen of Rain]

i love the stengt in the end, otherwise i think this poem is less worked on compared to others, i miss the uniqueness in the ideas and the amazing imagery and lines.. hwoever your strucutre in this poem is great..

[Confusion]

Thanx! yup, i agree this is not a brilliant poem, i think it is because i usually choose to write about my own experiences and not that much is going on atm, so not that much to write about! But i will try and improve this poem! thanx for commenting

[Confusion]

edited quite a bit, ive just kept two stanzas and scraped the rest... how's it now?