Untitled...again

[dominicmonaghan]

i wrote this a while ago, and figured i might as well post it. it is just a little thing a wrote, not very good, but i'd like to hear what people think.

An island of mystery contains secrets of old
where the greatest of warrior's fear takes a hold
the trees of deception lead travelers astray
towards pits of despair behind mists of grey
the ocean of nightmares
makes worst dreams comet rue
while the cliffs of discouragement
have been defeated by few
the cavern of darkness
consumes light that surrounds
the dragon of death cries
drowning all sounds
a lake of pain lies under a mountain of sorrow
causing the sadness today
and the deaths of tomorrow
the goblins and orcs
of torture and fear
are the only known
inhabitants here

for the title, i was thinking maybe, an island of secrets

[dominicmonaghan]

come true*

[jackfrost]

I thought your poem was really cool! And the rhyming was well done. I usually think that writing can be inhibited by making it rhyme, but I think that you got the point across really well! Good job!
jack frost

[dominicmonaghan]

thanks! i didn't think anyone would reply.

[Queen of Rain]

You handle the rhyming well, that is uncommon... i like your imagery a lot too

[dominicmonaghan]

thanks!!!