Why

[darktears]

Did You Leave,
Because you find somebody else,
Or was it just me?
Why did you go away

Because now I cry,
Every night on my pillow,
Because your not here,
To hold my hand.

All at once, these Walls are caving In...
All at once, I can not breathe,
Without you here.
Can you see me?

*Chorus*
So Your proud of what you've done?
How does it make you feel?
Can you sleep at night,
Knowing Somebody is crying over you?
Why do you do the things you do?
Why do you take things from others?
Why did you rip people's souls,
From the bottom of their broken hearts?
Why?

So I listened to my head
Because it's the only smart thing inside me,
And I took a walk,
But all those trails and roads reminded me of you,

And it hurts to look out the window,
Because your house is glowing eerily at me,
And it hurts to watch snowfall,
Because that's where I expierenced love with you.

I don't want to listen to heartwrenching themes,
All I want to do is,
Sit here and Cry for me

*Chorus*
So Your proud of what you've done?
How does it make you feel?
Can you sleep at night,
Knowing Somebody is crying over you?
Why do you do the things you do?
Why do you take things from others?
Why did you rip people's souls,
From the bottom of their broken hearts?
Why?

Do you know how hard it is for me?
Or do you laugh behind my back,
With your friends,
You fight with them,
Because they can't take it either,
You loved somebody else,
So you took her and left me in a pile of nothing.

Can you sleep at night?
Knowing somebody is crying over you?
Can you look at yourself through the remains of a broken mirror,
Or do you just laugh?

*Chorus*
So Your proud of what you've done?
How does it make you feel?
Can you sleep at night,
Knowing Somebody is crying over you?
Why do you do the things you do?
Why do you take things from others?
Why did you rip people's souls,
From the bottom of their broken hearts?
Why?

[Queen of Rain]

Ok so I love the chorus..
Generally i like your entire pieces..
however this one feels really really cliché in the start, suddenly diciton is lost and its teengae rambling..
you can make something more useful out of those feelings i think

[darktears]

Okay, I'll work on it. I haven't been writing serious stuff in a little while, so I'm kind of, blah right now. I love the word blah, don't know why, I just do.

[muzikishappiness]

I do agree that its not the best I've seen from you, and the topic is a bit cliché, but its better than most work I read or listen to on this topic. I like how this one doesnt rhyme, especially since its on this sort of topic. When things on this topic rhyme, one can usually guess the entire verse from the first line, but I really had to read it, not just know exactly what you were going to say.

This part:

So I listened to my head
Because it's the only smart thing inside me,

This part really got me because this really expressed the bitter feelings you were having. :-(

Thats good and bad I suppose, haha.

[Ramona]

The chorus is very nice, but I do think I've seen better from you. I usually like your work but this one is a bit off.

[Ramona]

Urg, I have again realized that I said the exact same thing as queen of rain.