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Post by Confusion on Aug 5, 2005 3:43:11 GMT -8
Dancing in men’s clothes
No more tipsy woes
You woe
Pedal pushing whores are here
They’ll grab him with their claws, my dear
Through that dusty phase
Never had a heart to break
Never had a soul to wake
Dancing in men’s clothes
No more tipsy woes
I’ll woe
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Post by Confusion on Aug 5, 2005 3:44:05 GMT -8
very short, i know..
this is the first song i've ever written.... i just wrote it this second and know it's not very good, but thought i'd post it anyway...
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Post by darktears on Aug 5, 2005 12:43:35 GMT -8
It needs a little bit of editing, I think. That's my opinion. That's actually quite good for your first song..I think. It's also interesting in the good way, not the bad one. It made me think.
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Post by Confusion on Aug 6, 2005 10:14:29 GMT -8
yup, i think it needs bucket loads of editing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ill get round to it sometime!
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Post by darktears on Aug 10, 2005 16:13:57 GMT -8
yes, lol.
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Post by Confusion on Aug 11, 2005 5:17:19 GMT -8
i think i might have it as a poem instead.... what do y'al think? with a bit deeper emotion in some verses i think it could make an okay poem..
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Post by darktears on Aug 11, 2005 8:54:20 GMT -8
yes it would make a very good poem I think. It also would make a good song with editing and stuff. I think probaly a nicer poem though.
I just had to say this. When you look to the side of the main page and your on the topic Songs/Lyrics. It says when and where the last person posted. When I posted it said darktears in men's clothes. I thought that was kinda funny.
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Post by Confusion on Aug 11, 2005 9:43:40 GMT -8
hehe,  |
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Post by Confusion on Aug 11, 2005 9:44:06 GMT -8
now it says confusion in mens clothes  |
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Post by darktears on Aug 12, 2005 8:10:30 GMT -8
that's funny.
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