You talk about lovin’

[Queen of Rain]

There was an early morning
when I woke up in your bed
and all your sweetness strangled me
and this is what I said

I am not your little girl
I am not the one you think
Oh you picked up a baby
but this woman walks away

When are we gonna stop believing?
In a love that isn’t true
If only I could speak up
I would say it to you

Naive naive that was what I was
You talk about lovin’<br>But its passion that I breathe


(this is the first verse and the chorus, far too popish but i still like it, what do you think?)

[roxiecheerchika]

its okay...i mean i like it in all....but where is the rhyme and the rytheme....sry (cant spell good)

[Queen of Rain]

there is no rhymes as u mite notice, i dont depend on those..

i think there is rhythm in it, ok that ill need to change it to a more even pattern in the followign verses... im more worried this song turnign too much pop..