Can't You Tell?

[darktears]

Don't you feel it
When your mind starts to wonder
She's still standing there
Underneath the thunder

The room is moving
It's really spinning
She can't stop thinking
Of when you were just kidding

She can feel the heart beats
She can feel your lies
Buried far beneath you
Lost in your eyes

*chorus*

Don't you know she's still there
Still calling out to you
She wants to feel you there
She wants to be there with you, too
Can't you tell she's not invisible?
Can't you tell she loves you?


The hurt inside their voices
The love inside their heart
You seem to think you know them
But you don't know they're hurt

You seem to love their words
The way they express theirselves
But you never seem to care
What it's all about.

Just look deep inside

*chorus*x2

Don't you know she's still there
Still calling out to you
She wants to feel you there
She wants to be there with you, too
Can't you tell she's not invisible?
Can't you tell she loves you?

Oh, can't you tell she loves you?

She needs to know your there
She needs to know you care
Just want to let you know
She won't go.

*chorus*

Don't you know she's still there
Still calling out to you
She wants to feel you there
She wants to be there with you, too
Can't you tell she's not invisible?
Can't you tell she loves you?

She is still there
She's still calling out to you
Feel you there
Be there with you
Can't you tell she's not invisible?
Can't you tell she loves you?

[Ramona]

I'd say it was an awesome, catchy little song. Easy to remember and probably to sing. Pair it with a good melody and you're set to rock. Beautiful.

[darktears]

wow, thanks. I showed it to my friend to and he thought it was good. It was kinda something I thought of on the spot, so I didn't know if it was that great or not. From your reply I think it's better then I thought. Thanks alot.

[Queen of Rain]

I really liked it!! u realyl write something that is both beautíful and easysung..

[darktears]

MERCI!!

[darktears]

Sorry, I was in the french mood, lol

[roxiecheerchika]

i really liked it..i tried it w/ a few tunes and i really luved singing it...great job...

[usgeisha]

Wow~It's really catchy! I loved it. The rhyming is not forced, it fits really perfectly. Good job!

[darktears]

Thank you all, so very much. I've never heard anyone say such nice things about my writing before. Thank you very much, I appreciate it.

[Queen of Rain]

read this again just because i liked it so much.. it so comes to one as a song its amazing.. hit me though that "invisible" is a really complicated word to sing... esp in a chorus liek this.. but it works neways if u dont feel liek changing...

[darktears]

Awe, thanks everyone. It makes me feel really good, that you accuattly came back and read the song again, because you liked it that much!! Thank you!