Autumn

[tchyarink]

Autumn

Autumn
A sentimental season
A perfect reason
For recalling last year

Autumn
It makes me sigh
Perhaps even cry
Such a season

Red, gold, yellow leaves
Wander to my room
A cool autumn breeze weaves
The season together

Autumn
I still remember
Last September
When you told me

gItfs the perfect time
For us to walk and part.h
I could only stand there
With a broken heart

Autumn
A melancholy season
A perfect reason
For me to forget it all

Autumn
Such a lonely season

... If you could please tell me what you think of it... Thanx!

[usgeisha]

I loved the rhyming (sp... i know). Sugiiiiiii~ I can't rhyme too well.

[tchyarink]

Yes you CAN rhyme, my fellow friend, a.k.a. the only person who bothered to reply... seriously, I've been saying this for the last two hundred years, ppl, REPLY to ppl's works as well!!! Please!! It's quite frustrating not to have ANYBODY comment on your stuff, ya know?? Well ok whatever... THANK YOU for replying!!!

[Ramona]

It was pretty good. The rhythm needs a little tweaking and the rhymes were pretty common, but it was a nice poem.

[tchyarink]

Thanx. And sry I whined...

[foxyvolleyballchic]

I liked it but Its sounds more like a poem than a song.

[usgeisha]

I just read this again~ I agree with Foxyvolleyballchic--it's poem-like! ;D Which of course, is a good thing!

~*~gEnKi-ChAn~*~