Proud

[Ramona]

This is like the first 'dark' thing I've written in...forever and it's about a psychotic killer with low self-esteem, in case you couldn't tell.

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I swallowed all their pungent lies,
Muffled all their aching cries,
Turned down offered compromise,
Stared into their dying eyes.

Proud of me?

I told them it was just too late,
That I loved what they desecrate,
That they slaughter all that I create,
That their deaths would compensate.

Proud of me?

I knew all that they wished they’d known,
Before their only chance was blown,
I killed them all and heard them moan,
Now I'm not one of their own.

Proud of me?
You should be.

[Queen of Rain]

great.. what i love about your idea is that it gives a very deep theme, that not applies to everybody concerning what other ppl do to once self esteem.. rhymes and rhtyhgm is really nice.. i feel though that this poem could be further extended maybe?

[Confusion]

i realli like it!!! but i agree it would be excellent if it was extended

[Ramona]

Spank you both, but I think it might come out too forced if I tried to extend it. Maybe, but I'm kind of wary.

[Confusion]

cool, it's great how it is atm aswell!