Post by blutmond on Apr 15, 2005 17:26:41 GMT -8
Ok ok i wrote a song and i started writng a story with the title blood moon.. I might get rid of this but i just wanted to post it and have everybody's feedback.. thanx
“Blood Moon”<br>By Steve Jeczala
This is the year 4000, when earth has collapsed against aliens who have invaded. Earth is now under the aliens’ control. On earth, there are rebels hiding, Aliens are trying to wipe out the entire human race. But it all depended on one man, and he is Taliesin. Taliesin is a hero to all humans. He led the human army against the biggest bloodiest war ever and helped win it. Some said he devised a plan that blew up the aliens’ mother ship. But unforuately, the aliens are still coming, and the humans are rushing to defend their home.
Taliesin wakes up from a bad dream, which he can’t remember. Taliesin gets up and walks down the hallway of his mansion to the kitchen. He takes out and cooks himself breakfast. Taliesin was a burly man who has scars from wars he has fought in. Taliesin was remembered as a hero and he knows he will fade into a legend in hundreds or thousands of years. He joined the army being inspired by his father, who fought and died saving his family from a group of rebels. He was a space marine in the 21st platoon. He fought off small aliens’ invasion. He got promoted to General after 10 years in the army. Until the biggest alien invasion came, He had to fight but he retreated and hid until after the invasion. He found out that aliens had taken over the world. He was furious, he knew he had to do something, which caused him to devise a plan that had damaged the aliens’ army. He blew up the mother ship of the aliens. That caused chaos among the aliens so they fled. Now Taliesin has to build up an army of his own to defend against aliens. Taliesin finished eating his breakfast; he changed into his military clothes, then hopped into his military helicopter. He drove off to a hidden base nearby. His helicopter landed on a heli-pad. He shut down the Helicopter and walked out through a large metal door that just slide open. Inside the army base, was packed with soldiers and high tech computers. He walked down the hall way to his “War Room”. In that room, there was a large table with a map of Earth and Space, also there were little toys that represented his army and the aliens’ army. Taliesin sat there for hours and hours trying to figure out how to beat them offensively or defensively. Until a messenger come through the door and gave a message to Taliesin.
This is the year 4000, when earth has collapsed against aliens who have invaded. Earth is now under the aliens’ control. On earth, there are rebels hiding, Aliens are trying to wipe out the entire human race. But it all depended on one man, and he is Taliesin. Taliesin is a hero to all humans. He led the human army against the biggest bloodiest war ever and helped win it. Some said he devised a plan that blew up the aliens’ mother ship. But unforuately, the aliens are still coming, and the humans are rushing to defend their home.
Taliesin wakes up from a bad dream, which he can’t remember. Taliesin gets up and walks down the hallway of his mansion to the kitchen. He takes out and cooks himself breakfast. Taliesin was a burly man who has scars from wars he has fought in. Taliesin was remembered as a hero and he knows he will fade into a legend in hundreds or thousands of years. He joined the army being inspired by his father, who fought and died saving his family from a group of rebels. He was a space marine in the 21st platoon. He fought off small aliens’ invasion. He got promoted to General after 10 years in the army. Until the biggest alien invasion came, He had to fight but he retreated and hid until after the invasion. He found out that aliens had taken over the world. He was furious, he knew he had to do something, which caused him to devise a plan that had damaged the aliens’ army. He blew up the mother ship of the aliens. That caused chaos among the aliens so they fled. Now Taliesin has to build up an army of his own to defend against aliens. Taliesin finished eating his breakfast; he changed into his military clothes, then hopped into his military helicopter. He drove off to a hidden base nearby. His helicopter landed on a heli-pad. He shut down the Helicopter and walked out through a large metal door that just slide open. Inside the army base, was packed with soldiers and high tech computers. He walked down the hall way to his “War Room”. In that room, there was a large table with a map of Earth and Space, also there were little toys that represented his army and the aliens’ army. Taliesin sat there for hours and hours trying to figure out how to beat them offensively or defensively. Until a messenger come through the door and gave a message to Taliesin.