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Post by Confusion on Jun 1, 2005 12:18:09 GMT -8
Already June
You're still controlling me
Half a year
Gone
Wasted
You
Half a year
I still think of you
I hope you think of me too
I look back
Resolutions made
'2005, shall be the best year of my life'
Resolutions unprepared
Never knowing what the future may hold
Next year shall be different
'2006, never fall in love'
Half a year
Half a year too late
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Post by Confusion on Jun 2, 2005 13:17:01 GMT -8
ahhhh, time flies!!!!!!!!!!! any comments on this?  |
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Post by Queen of Rain on Jun 4, 2005 4:11:43 GMT -8
ur ideas have imrpoved sooo much since the first poem i read of you, theme is great and the style of the poem is jsut amazzzzing.. i looove the ending its jsut perfekt.. first time i reasd this poem i thought it was about overcontrolled relationships.. but now when i read it again it feels like you could have written abut me.. omg i promised 2005 would be the best year of my life, but my emotions belong to a guy that doesn want me, its 6 months since he left me and now ive "decided" to not believe in love..
thank you for this amazing poem, i feel much less lonely now
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Post by Confusion on Jun 4, 2005 7:48:08 GMT -8
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 11, 2005 16:07:03 GMT -8
Nice job. One of the best kinds of poetry is the kind readers can connect with. Wonderful.
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Post by Confusion on Jun 12, 2005 2:53:00 GMT -8
Thankyou!
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Post by Ramona on Jun 12, 2005 14:54:22 GMT -8
I lurve the ending. The entire poem reminds me of someone I know.
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Post by Confusion on Jun 13, 2005 7:30:42 GMT -8
thanx!! |
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 22, 2005 10:10:56 GMT -8
maybe it's just me, but something about numbers, like in years, just kind of throws me off. they seem too technical, especially in poetry, and especially this one which is sooo beautiful. now, this is probably a weird suggestion and please ignore it if you want to, but maybe you could just say "resolutions made this year, it shall be the best year of my life" instead of 2005, and then just take out the 2006, because you say next year in the line before it and makes sense. but maybe, probably, i'm just weird.
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Post by Confusion on Jun 23, 2005 8:43:49 GMT -8
thanx! i get what you mean... im not sure yet though... ill give it some thought
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jun 25, 2005 18:35:03 GMT -8
kewl.
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